Stay Gold

Stay Gold

A Poem by ConfuzzledKidd
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A poem about youth

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The light is fading, 
Some drifted away into the shadows
You're still moving,
Thriving in the darkness 
Moving on to the next one 

Can we even call it youthful exuberance?
Doubts are minimal 
Fear doesn't exist 
I was young and chained to myself
Tonight the shackles came off 

You're bounded by nothing 
Keep moving in the darkness 

Stay gold.

© 2015 ConfuzzledKidd


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Really good poem man. I'd appreciate it more if you made it a bit longer and went more in depth with the poem. Please check out some of my work

Posted 8 Years Ago


ConfuzzledKidd

8 Years Ago

Thanks for the feedback
This was a great read! Thank you for sharing!

Best,

Laurara Monique

Posted 9 Years Ago


ConfuzzledKidd

9 Years Ago

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it,

ConfuzzledKidd
Added rhyme or two will take this poem to a next level.

It has a soul. Substance if you will. You are clear about it. Easy to relate. Focus on smaller words, or big words that can rhyme in the end with two smaller (example: I have a SYNDROME , bear in left, smokes in right and I got my SIN ON.)

Keep writing. In the end writing is all about politics. (structure; both conceptual and contextual).

Posted 9 Years Ago


ConfuzzledKidd

9 Years Ago

Thanks I'll keep that in mind for future poems!
good... i like it simple and brief and good...

Posted 9 Years Ago


ConfuzzledKidd

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind words
thats a really good poem. it was very encouraging. good job and keep writing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


ConfuzzledKidd

9 Years Ago

Thanks, I don't write too much but maybe I'll write some more
That's some good s**t right there

Posted 9 Years Ago


ConfuzzledKidd

9 Years Ago

Kind words , thank you!
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