Zedd Moon

It's poem of glimmering magic<3

Soulless purple stars light up the night.

Zapping Zedd glimmers through the night.

Fairies shimmer in joy,

As to celebrate light shown in the dark for the very first time.

Is the dark side,

But it is somehow good.

Pastel colors rome the night.

Sadness glowing bright colors.

Oh well how?

Just show a little kindness.

And you will become Zedd and his moon.

Noon became all of him.

Dust to dawn fights him all.

Blame no one,

For all this joy.

For a rock less shine,

Zedd wishes to be a Nightlight just for a day.

So he can be whole once again.

Author's Note

I wrote this when i was bored waiting for my doctors appointment I hope you love magic<3

Reviews

[Howling_Wolf]

This was a beautifully written poem, and excellent usage of time. I usually bid my time reading a magazine or watching whatever is on the TV at doctor appointments . Next time, I will take a notebook and pen instead of magazines.

[Pink Pastel]

Good choice I actually wrote it in my phone lol

[iamshadowine]

It such an amazing poetry!
and especially these lines:
"Blame no one,

For all this joy.

For a rock less shine,"

*wonderstruck*
keep writing :D

[Pink Pastel]

Thank you:)

[Wolf_Lord]

Hello, loved this, and it is magical. I am however a critiquer and as such please do not take offense I make a couple of points. You used the word 'night' to end three sentences. This is generally frowned upon in a serious poem. Ditch the punctuation. Since you are using center justify, it is unnecessary; except for colons, semicolons , and question marks. (As to celebrate light shown in the dark for the very first time) is an incomplete sentence and should be split into two separate complete thoughts as well to maintain the flow. (And you will... become Zedd and his moon) Eliminate 'and you will' and it will flow better. (Zedd wishes to be a Nightlight just for a day.) Break this sentence in two as well and the whole thing will flow better. It is a matter of rhythm and meter. An easy way to check is to read it outloud to yourself, then you can actually hear the flow. As for incomplete sentences; I highly suggest using Microsoft Word to check your writing. If you do not have it google the online version. It just needs a little tweaking, and I really liked it. Good luck, and you can submit to me to read again after you have made the changes if you like.
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[hi]

filled with color but to me I fond it hard to follow, but I like how you wrote this while waiting for doctor

[Pink Pastel]

Lol yea I love my randomness♡♡♡

[GalaxyGhost]

I love this because it sounds a lot like a fairytale and has a beautiful tone to it. It's quite magical!

[Pink Pastel]

Thanks girly:)

[sinNsincerity]

Zedd meet Zod... hehe
Nice write hon.

[Pink Pastel]

I get it funny superman^-^

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

The magic that is infused is beautiful :) loved how this poem was flawed out. Very good imagery loved it :) :)

[Pink Pastel]

Thank you so much (hugs you)*-*

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Meant laid out not flawed lol and your welcome :)

[Pink Pastel]

nah its okay weirdly I read the comment as good lol

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Okay good lol :) :)

[Pink Pastel]

ha ha ha its okay i hope you keep spreading your kindness more

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

I do. I spread my kindness everywhere :)

[Pink Pastel]

That's good^-^