Petal

another quck freefrom

the flowers bloom
untill they blossom
the petals fall
and are forgotten
into the dirt
they decompose
into the earth
they will erode
the plant still stands up
stong and proud
until next spring
'till its aroused
the roots spread wide
througout the soil
its such a shame the beautys spoilt
a part of life that is important
winter spring summer and autum....

Author's Note

dont watch the grammar
written on iphone

Reviews

[Tom Robert Cowpey]

^^^^ i wrote on iphone, i dont consider myself as a grammtical poet, if you wat to criticise please criticise me on the content, im not arsed it took me 10 mins haha

[Trigorin]

Not bad, but check your spelling and grammar. Instead of telling us not to pay attention to it, you should go over and fix it yourself - it's not that difficult.
You have a good concept here and you've executed it fairly well. The ending is, I think, a little lackluster compared to the buildup you've given in the rest of the piece, but it's still not bad. Well done.