My pain

My pain

A Poem by Crazo14

Standing here with blood shot eyes 
Tears running down the cracks on my face
Feeling like I'm shattered into piece of glass
Not feeling any sorrow from your looks
Seeing no sympathy from your voice
Looking at you with no shame
Showing me the pain when I look at you
You just use me but I have yet to find out for what
Pulling me all directions with my emotions
Hurting me with you words
Seeing you with other guys shows me your not trust wrothy
Blew me away when I told you personal secrets
Kept me a secret from everyone
Had my arms open for you 
Let you read me like a open book
But you don't see my pain
My reason for all of the faults in you
Not going to feel your stabs in my heart anymore
When I close my eyes I see your face
Tring to get you out my mind
It's not me its you
I don't care for your tears
Cause' I know they're a lie
So get out my sight or they're will be a fight

© 2011 Crazo14


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I'm sorry for whatever you went through, love can be a hard thing to have. You threw everything you had into this piece, obviously. Well written

Posted 8 Years Ago


You put your emotions so clearly out there. You don't hold back. You let them flow freely. Pouring your heart out to your readers.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Honestly moving and passionate....the emotions run wild here and this screams! xx

Posted 9 Years Ago


good poem.i liked it a lot.
good job crazo

Posted 9 Years Ago


It is a great poem.... ^^,

Posted 9 Years Ago


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i like how this poem doesn't just tell but it also shows. great job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Good poem... :)))

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow. Really good job! :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


The odd grammar error, and too succinct in places 'So get out my sight or they're will be a fight'. Forgive me, but that's an incredibly weak ending to an other wise decent poem. A tip I find useful is whenever you're writing about an emotion, try to never use the word of the emotion. Like, when writing about pain, never mention the word pain once. Instead, show us what the pain felt like, how bad it was etc.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow. Good job.Very strong power there,. Keep it up bud :)

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Crazo14
Crazo14

Erwin, TN



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