Reminders Of A Broken Heart

I had a bad night last night. Too many terrible things happened. It inspired this poem. Hope you all enjoyed it.

I saw my ex-girlfriend last night
With her new guy
I saw the girl that I liked
So I'm trying to be nice
And try to get to know her
but she put me in the friend zone
Now I go home
and I check online
I made the mistake
Of checking my ex's facebook page
She's now someone's wife
Damn what is wrong with my life?
These are reminders of a broken heart
I feel ripped apart
But perhaps it's my fault
Since maybe there was no spark
But now its the time for me to wipe my tears
I need to move on from here
I pick up the pieces of my heart from the floor
and put it back in my chest
I need to be on my best
And I wont rest
Until my heart is whole again
I'm tired of being just friends
I'll say be my girl instead
Let's go out on a date
If it doesn't work then fine it's great
at least i have my confidence is back
Hopefully the broken heart will just be
Reminders of the past
of a lost loves that was never meant to last

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, this is truly a sad and depressing poem but also very good. I like how it shares a true story and unravels details about your love life and how you feel about your ex-girlfriend and your current crush. The title goes very well along with the poem, I must definitely say. I can relate to this somehow, of course not the married part. Haha. But one time I was texting a guy I liked. He WAS my best guy friend and I dated him once. We were flirting for weeks, and I got grounded for a day or two then got my phone back. I found out that he was already in another relationship. Like wth? His signature on his phone changed all of a sudden when we started texting. It had their initials together with the word "forever" at the end. Urggh! :/ But that's an example of a reminder of the past. Back to your poem, it's well-written and really touches the audience's heart :))

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Destinyxi]

blehhhh this is sad =/

it was very well written. It would probably be my favorite from you but it made me frown a lot in sadness >.<

Keep it up! (not the sad poetry, but the poetry in general) :P

[Crazy Cat Man]

thanks i had a horrible night last night. its gonna take me awhile to get better. just feeling the blues :(

[Destinyxi]

chin up, you'll make it through. Be positive! Don't make me give you a similar speech to the one you gave me.

[Crazy Cat Man]

oh yeah ;) last week u were the one that was sad but its my turn to be sad :P ill take the advice that i gave u that u are returning to me.

[Destinyxi]

you better. don't make me write a funny poem or something (I'd suck at it) to cheer you up.

[Crazy Cat Man]

I wanna see u write a funny poem :) think about whats bothering u and attempt to make fun of it :) thats my assignment to u

[Destinyxi]

bleh but it'll be funny because it'll be so damn horrible.

[Crazy Cat Man]

i have faith in u :)

[Falling Leaf.]

Your emotions were right under the surface here. I enjoyed the ending as well. Nicely done.

Happy writing,
Savannah

[Wolf]

I love this poem...and strong emotions lead to great artwork :)
I can feel the feeling of the broken heart, well done :)

[kublakhan27]

It's a shame that the most painful moments usually produce the best writing...it's a great piece, and I'm glad to see it end on a optimistic note.^^

[Chesney W.]

an amazing poem of how many things can bring up the past and make you regret what happened. But all I have to say is, the past is the past, it's done and over with, there is nothing you can do about what has already happened. Just keep your head held high and and keep positive thoughts about the future!! :)

[EileenMarie]

Great write! Very emotional and gripping! Sorry your heart has to hurt :( we have all been there and although you probably just want me to shut up with my oh I understand..... I am still a hopeless romantic!

[Crazy Cat Man]

thanks. im just tired of bad things happening to me to inspire me to write poems just like this. i want good things so i can write good things :)

[eglantine]

I hate dreams that mess with my emotions in real life... it's the worst because then it follows you throughout the day like an oil spill. THanks for sharing

[Crazy Cat Man]

I didnt even had a dream. this actually happened. i saw my ex last night with a new guy.....same night same place, a girl i used to like who just put me in the friend zone while she complains about her dates.....ugh too much for me to handle.

[eglantine]

ohhhhh i thought you had dreamed this because of the lil quoatations under the title. life sucks sometimes. You just need to strutt your stuff and be proud of who ya are :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

Yes u are correct. i shouldn't be so hard on myself. I did get a girl's number who has seen me perform several times. we hit it up and shes seen me around Ny in the same neighborhood LOL so thats a sign of moving on

[That_Girl]

:'( I'm sorry. This is too sad for you to be writing! The first half or so reminded me of something Blink-182 would write. I really liked it... but I hope things start to shape up.

[Crazy Cat Man]

yeah thanks. im too disillusioned now. cant think straight now. and my bday is coming up and I decided not to have a party. its just gonna be too many d*****s around trying to hunt.

[That_Girl]

Just invite a bunch of girls! :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

i did that last year. douchy guys came lol