Save the Night

Save the Night

A Poem by OctoberDawn
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An urging to push through the times when you are deceived by the person you trusted most.

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"Save the night" she said, as I was lost inside her eyes.
And there it was I lost my heart, right beside her lies.
Was it freely given, or was it stolen away?
My weak heart needed a home; I asked if it could stay. 
But her eyes she turned away, for love she had no place.
And there I was left alone, her memories to chase.
I still miss her presence, though her words left me undone;
So save the night for those of us who cannot face the sun.

© 2012 OctoberDawn


Author's Note

OctoberDawn
Working with 13 syllables, little different than I'm used to.

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I loved the last line. It gives a perfect summary of the poem in that one little line. I really enjoyed the rhyme scheme and how well everything flowed together and transitioned. Really nice piece!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

'For those of us who cannot face the sun' was by far my favorite line. I loved this poem. Good work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Perfection, I'd say, I think I may have just found a new poet worthy of mine ears!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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OctoberDawn
OctoberDawn

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My name is Criss Hill, I'm 20 and I'm from Colorado. I don't so much consciously write poetry as my heart takes control of my pen and urges me to capture a pale fragment of the beauty and heartbreak o.. more..

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