Enlightenment

Ever just "know" something without having been directly or indirectly involved? This is what I experience and I'm desparately trying to get it down on paper.

Suddenly, like a punch in the gut, sheering pain splinters inside me then radiates, stealing the very breath of my lungs and leaving me dazed. As if struck by lightning, an electrical charge surges erratically but purposely to every nerve ending until my brain is lit up with vivid and confusing images; flashes of a moment, a string of events or thoughts and emotion. Most of which are not my own. Blinded from the world around me yet, I see everything so clearly.

Author's Note

WIP- I have no idea where this is taking me and is a work in progress.

Reviews

[bobc]

Let it come...looks like it'll be worthwhile...bobc

[FateDictates]

you should continue it, you're almost there, had to remind myself to breathe...

[CrochetRie]

Run on sentences or just that good? LOL

[FateDictates]

feels like it just needs to be rounded off..what happened next?? leave a dramatic pause lol

[CrochetRie]

LMAO- I know- it was just one of moments when the words come before my pen couldn't catch up; like a deflated balloon. I'll look at it and try to get back into the "place" that brought the words.

[FateDictates]

so know that one, sudden rush of words and then..............................................................bloody pregnant pause........

[CrochetRie]

LMAO! Well, I felt it was strong enough to post as a reminder to continue it one day. You're about to make that day happen, my friend!

[Topaz]

The ability to see truth....that is hard! To see truth in one's self and to apply the feelings and the revelation to one's self....Rare! Interesting writing. I hope to see more from you :)

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good..!!!

Keep writing..!!!

[Branch Isole]

For this reader, with slight modification the last line is a poem in and of itself.

[coin show]

I love, 'blinded from the world around me, I see everything clearly' Should you start your story there?

[TheFemininePad]

I think your poem is very interesting, and I am intrigued to read more since this is a work in progress. I like how you describe the process of memories being transferred into you without you ever experiencing them yourself. I'm looking forward to reading this when it is finished.

[Kiari Sabon]

like it

[Morning Star]

Wow this piece left this reader me craving for more never thought i say that
hope to see more soon
excellent !
XXX

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

its all good....
high time...good time...
(*_*)