The Corners Fruitless Woes

The Corners Fruitless Woes

A Poem by Cruz Niq

We look down on creativity and two of a kind
We criticize, berate and whine
Who do you think you are?
The whimsical manic fairy girl at the bar
Here to whisk my troubles away?
"No actually I wanted to say"
You're not that special
That's just something you're taught
"Ow wow, never had that thought
Sarcasm, do you know her?"
Lovely little thing with a chip on her shoulder
Passive, aggressive, with a sting
Formed by a pull on the heart strings
I never considered harps to be so god awful 
Until these wasted chronicles

© 2015 Cruz Niq


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yeah cool keep going write more

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cruz Niq

5 Years Ago

Thankyou XD
I think this was well written. I found that wondering who was berating you seemed to be the audience. I felt a definite frustration from the writer, which is good--raw emotion is important. The harp comment is pretty impactful, and the "something you're just taught" still rings in my ear. Good stuff. Maybe a little more separation in the quotations could help, cause for the first second I was lost as to who was speaking--however, I re read it and found that it worked well. The first instance could cause confusion to those that might not necessarily know what you're using the quotations for, however after I re read and re read, I found that I enjoyed it more each time I did. I like that intro line a lot, since it's true, more because humanity looks down on anything at all--and you point that out as creativity, or the representation of uniqueness, etc. and two of a kind--which is the commercialism and repetition the world already sees, so this works well. In conclusion, I found you had a lot of good elements in the poem, and i'm glad to have read it, so I look forward to reading more and more and better and better and better work that I know for certain will stem from your hands. Good stuff overall. Yeah I really like the ending a lot--haha I just re read those last four lines like 10 times :D

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Cruz Niq

5 Years Ago

Originally I'd written this on my phone without any punctuation at all. I realized that the poem may.. read more

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