Your storm

 

Colliding

Falling into your gravitational pull

We skirt around felled trees

And misplaced debris

As you uproot me.

Clashing teeth and tangled limbs

You flash a category 6 warning into my

Disheveled hair

Whispering of a calm

Promising relief to come

I am left to the mercy

Of your storm 

Reviews

[terry smith]

wish I had written this ...I love it You flash a category 6 warning into my
Disheveled hair ...that is awesome :D

[Celine McNally]

Wow. The consonance in this poem alone captures the sense of the storm and allows for your whimsical descriptions. The language is absolutely stunning all around. "Clashing teeth and tangled limbs" - such a strong image. Well done!

[Inject Positivity]

Religiously touching, as if a storm of heaven blowing on earth to clarify the broken and debris... Your word choices are superb to convey the clearest imageries in the poem... A poem of complete surrender to the highest power of this universe...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Philip Muls]

Left to the mercy of your storm...beautiful. The whole piece indeed gives a strong feeling of surrendering to a higher power. Promises of relief, uprooting...almost religious.

Well done. It speaks to the senses. Disturbing in a good way.

[dan]

Crystal, Your wording is magical, spellbinding. The storm theme, with uprooted trees, category 6 warning and misplaced debris is very powerful and conveys your feelings impeccably. My compliments and congratulations on this moving piece. take care...dan

[Emily]

That ending was just perfect!!
Keep it up!!

[Karmee]

very nicely written and expressed.

[Asante]

Feelings for someone else can, in some ways, render us powerless to them (for better or for worse, depends on the interpretation). I love this piece because it accurately describes that, to me. :)
Very visual, very metaphorical, with a dose of grace and rawness to it as well. Great work, Crystal!