November

November afternoon

November

07 August 2018

14:16

Afternoon Driving home from hospital high on the hill

Grass still frosted in sheltered spot

Irish Sea and Solway Firth

Shimmering silver blue

Reflecting the clear autumn sky

 

Distant Dumfries and Galway hills

Dark blue grey fading in the distant horizon

Twenty - Thirty miles away  to a misty shadow

Over head three squadrons of geese

In Vee formations

Changing leaders the front one slides back to find a  gap further back

Like racing cyclists in the peleton

Ravenglass; Duddon Bay; Deeside?

Always going south

Eventually reaching Africa

For winter sun

 

Further on the Lake District Fells

Sprinkled with icing dust

Grasmor like a huge

Christmas pud

Will the icing cover taste of  Rum?

Doubt

Skiddaw

Cloud leaving a pristine white cover

 

Sky of light blue with distant

Faint cloud

Wind from the north

Gentle but cold

Home soon to a warm house and drink

 

Wild Rose 2018

Reviews

[Hasan669]

This is a heartwarming poem. I fully agree with the sentiment in this poem, 'there's no place like home'. What really catches the imagination in this poem are the references to different locations in Ireland but also a reference to Africa. That simile about likening Grasmor to a Christmas pud was especially interesting. The poetry moves along smoothly and somewhat quickly without the use of rhyming.

[Wild Rose]

Not Ireland The West coast of mainland UK - The Irish Sea separates us from Ireland
We are in The Lake District National Park
I am no good at rhyming > I just make a plan in my mind and write as it comes into my mindas the writing proceeds

Just realised I missed out a flight of geese
Going to edit now

[Hasan669]

Thanks for correcting me. I still like the way the poem flows along.

[Wild Rose]

Confusing The sea for us is the Irish sea - think in Ireland it is the English sea

Like what we call the North Sea On Holland it is called the English Sea

[Abhishek Izy]

This is a very powerful imagery and it’s wobderful to read

[Wild Rose]

Thank for reading and taking time to comment
Riding home as a passenger with time to look around at something interesting instead of traffic and roads

[Ken Simm.]

This is wonderful. Such a poem to read whilst standing in front of a roaring fire and listening to the winds outside. Can I say without being rude or a know it all that the geese come here for the winter from Northern climes and winter on the firth and places like Morecambe bay.
Irrespective of this it is a superb poem.

[Wild Rose]

Barley girl has made a similar comment
I will make a revision when I get chance

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I will make a revision when I get chance

Helpful comments are always welcome

Often (like this one) I will write it out and post without rereading

[Ken Simm.]

I hope you didn't feel I was being presumptuous. I do like the feel of the poem.

[Wild Rose]

No not at all I like constructive comments
After years of just writing technical lecture notes
Iam rusty on essays etc

[Laurierose]

This indeed is very heartwarming. This describes Novembers all around, I believe. This sort or car ride coaxes the passengers to a steady, hazy sleep. No matter how hard they'd fight it, the pull of such scenery is enough to dream about. This piece reminds of the subtitles of life that happens in this busy world. Stopping and smelling the roses every once in a while, does the mind well. Beautiful. Great read.

[Wild Rose]

Thank you > Too much to see when riding as a passenger here
On the NW coast; on the edge of the Lake District National Park
We moved from a heavy industrial area > shops houses & factories

[m3lody mae]

Sky of light blue with distant
Faint cloud
Wind from the north
Gentle but cold
Home soon to a warm house and drink

I loved these lines here, this is such a wonderful write here.

[Wild Rose]

Thank you
I attempted to describe what I could see
Normally I would be driving this route only see the car/road in front and my side mirrors

I was a passenger with the chance to look out at the scenery

Thanks for reading and the review

[NotUsinganymore]

Very nice poem! it flowed very nicely!

[Wild Rose]

Thank you only a short journey but lots to see

[NotUsinganymore]

I agree! But it’s fun!

[Intothemilkyway]

Loved reading this.You have quite a range of words you use for the poem ,i like that.
For me the message it conveyed its that no matter where you go ir travel to there is no place like home.Even if you are far away your sight will be drifted to where your home is.
Really a good work.

[Wild Rose]

Thank you > milky way ? stars or chocolate ???
We live on the edge of thr 'Lake District National park' who wouldn't want to return here ?
We are both long term travellers - Met as racing cyclists now have a camper van

Pleased you like my poem I have several more some with pictures

[Fran Marie]

your November sounds quite enchantin9g on a crisp clear autumn day
wiith a picturesque view of Nature s beauty in all its splendor..especially
liked the geese flying in formation . an air show all their own done in precision
and the Christmas pud/ hill analogy I thought a clever happy touch..

nice work

[Wild Rose]

Thank you Frank Marie > I go a job here and made this our home
This is a National Park > The Lake District > an area of lakes and mountains bordered on the west by the sea
The geese fly south autumn/winter and north in spring
We can see the rounded hills from home with the dark hills wearing a white cap I often think of Christmas puds

I keep putting on writing from this area with pictures to go with them > The other way round the pics are already taken

[Einstein Noodle]

nothing more invigorating than a walk-a-bout in November in the wondrous scene you created ... i have a strong impression you actually took this walk ;) the contrast of your frosted November title and the warmth of home and drink are finely filled with abundance of place and Christmas pud ..love it! i wouldn't dare say to change this or that Wild One ... a wonderful read ... the Africa mention is a surprise .. if not for the strength of all the rest i might say it is a bit distracting ... you could most certainly give us a whole 'nother round in Africa if you had a mind to ... very enjoyable read for me ..glad i did not miss it!
E.

[Wild Rose]

Thank you EN
Not a walk (12 mile car journey) but yes at one time we would have just taken it in our stride: so to say
Pleased you say to make no changes _ xcept the reference to Africa (that is where ti Geese are heading for (so I am told . but many do stay with us all winter)
Thick I will edit it out and another story
I appreciate your input

[Wild Rose]

I have rearranged it > if you have time to read and comment again > when you get the chance

[Einstein Noodle]

i think it reads smoother and the intent is clear ...all of it is so relatable ..up at midnight today and our November moon and sky are wondrous ... and the geese have been flying for about 3 weeks now ... its a bit colder than normal right now so we may not see many sticking around .. but you inspire me to keep a watch out for them extra ;)

[Wild Rose]

Thank you for re reading
Not going out today Gale force winds & heavy rain > have docs tomorrow
Not a frost November
I will look for some pics of the geese on land

[Einstein Noodle]

batten down the hatches Rose .. we had unusually strong winds for a day and a half last week ... saved me dealing with all the fallen leaves ;)

[Wild Rose]

Yes this morning here . just calming down
Our leaves have all been blow into the hedge bottom

[Chris Shaw]

You provide us with some pretty special imagery on a November day Wild Rose. I especially enjoyed your lines about the changing formations of those squadrons of geese. Fascinating to observe. Grasmor like a huge Christmas pud made me smile. You live in a very beautiful part of the world. Hope you are OK? You mentioned hospital drive.

Chris

[Wild Rose]

Thanks Christine
A journey I made every day when I was working
Hospital son had a CT scan prior to an opp to remove a troublesome metal plate from a knee opp - reults next week
Christmas puds > well the hills are rounded and twenty miles away they have a dark colour with snow for rum sauce . adds a bit of humor

[Chris Shaw]

I enjoyed the Christmas pud bit very much. It did add some humour. Hope all goes well for your son.

[Wild Rose]

Thanks He has a opp planned some time in Jan

[barleygirl]

This might be your best blend of analytically-conveyed journey steps combined with poetic observations along the way. This is a great marriage of your technical tendencies delivered with lots of detailed imagery. Your description of the way birds fly in formation, constantly shifting, is a symphony only you could convey the way you do it. Your writing is distinctive (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Wild Rose]

Thank you Margie you always give such encouragement in your comments
As we left the hospital I wished I Had a camera to catch the vista across the silvery blue sea.
The geese you have to marvel at the organisation also have to ask 'how they navigate and fly such long journeys'