Chocolate Eyes

Chocolate Eyes

A Poem by Elizabeth Marie

Your chocolate eyes,
They always shine,
Never sad or shy,
So beautiful,
So dark,
And deep,
Your chocolate eyes.

© 2011 Elizabeth Marie

Author's Note

Elizabeth Marie
I don't really know why i wrote this but it is about a guy i like and its sort of cool

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Concise, that's what it is. :D

It's so sweet of you to write about someone. He must've got really beautiful eyes. You are rather fortunate to have stared at his eyes. :D For technicals, the poem is ok...breaking it up at the third line and the sixth line would make it better. I like how it flows, it has some sort of unmeasured meter(ok, that didn't make sense...but I guess you get my point. )

Keep writing. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago

**sigh** who is it THIS time? :P
also... you spelled "chocolate" wrong in the title :P

Posted 13 Years Ago

Cute :)

Posted 13 Years Ago

CE is brief to the point luscious poetry ... Chocked full of sweet dark chocolate & lovely admiration for dreamy brown eyes ...

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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4 Reviews
Added on March 10, 2010
Last Updated on April 27, 2011


Elizabeth Marie
Elizabeth Marie

Southwest Harbor/ Bar Harbor, ME

I love to draw, paint, write, sleep, and other stuff. more..