Mine tiny line

Mine tiny line

A Poem by Pale Rose

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Mine tiny line,

Twists to shine,

Like a vine.

Mine tiny line,

As red as wine:

A salient sign.

Mine tiny line

Will not resign,

Will not decline;

It’s a shrine

To pain divine.

Never thine:

It is mine--

Mine tiny line.

© 2008 Pale Rose


Author's Note

Pale Rose
Very simple, but very carefully crafted. I hope you think so too.



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I like this. So simple but beautiful. Ambiguous.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mine-
could it perhaps be replaced with my?
I can't help thinking this entire piece could make so much more since if it was...

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Is this about cutting? If its not, don't be insulted! this is a really good poem!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very good choice of ryhming words. It is simple but crafty and I must say - Job well done!!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yeah, I can tell. I like it.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on November 27, 2008
Tags: self-harm, scars, dark poetry

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Pale Rose
Pale Rose

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Poetry is the ultimate expression of humanity. It is the only tool we have to express the depth of our emotions and suffering. As for my own, I see the dark side of life and find it beautiful. I seek .. more..

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