Let me in

 

There is a place I long to be

But your heart refuses to give me the key

I tried with love and words the same

Only to find my efforts were in vain

When I looked through the windows of your eyes

I saw your family and friends were all inside

So on the outside is where I remain

Until your heart is weak and feels pain

That is when you come to confide in me

And I realize it’s not me, but them without a key

So all along my visions were misconstrued

From inside out is what I viewed

Sometimes in life we want things so bad

If only I’d stopped and looked at what I had

I was inside the whole time with you

Even when you were venting and made me feel blue

I’ll take the good times and the bad all the same

Because inside your heart is where I want to remain

Reviews

[Dionysus Cain]

nice write i agree. i wouldn't say i see lot of pain in this poem, i see being reborn. now knowing that what you wearned for was always in your grasp. this is a great poem though, i can honestly can say i enjoyed it , until the end. i just felt i could have been more powerful. i think in this poem you matured in your own sense as a human. from a teenage like thinking to knowing. that is powerful.

[Charles D. Moorer]

heavy price to pay for love. This is what happens when one loves another more than the other loves the one.

[Wildecat]

This is a powerful write. A pleasure to read your poetry.

[THE LOST ROSE]

I really enjoyed this piece even though there was not a positive ending for you. Great write and you took the reader on a journey through your questions and travels. I look forward to reading more of your materials.

[Lyrical Love]

This poem clearly says you are on a journey. Watch out for the lions, tigers, and bears.
"So all along my visions were misconstrued
From inside out is what I viewed"
Continue to write and keep your eyes open.
There is power in your pen Lady!

[☮]

You definitely let all your pain out in your writings. This reminded me of Mary J's 2nd album, "My Life." Almost lyrical in a song form. I'm impressed. Looking forward to more.