Without Me

There is a pull in my shoulder

A constant tugging in my teeth

A steady reminder that without me

Reality would be obsolete

Responsibilities have built up

Bearing an invisible string each

Ceaseless in their caution

That I stay within reach 

Because without me it would fall,

This fragile world I bear

Obligations resonate within

Despite this stringed ensnare

Eventually, to my knees I fall

Snapping the cords that bite

To my surprise and end demise 

The world stands out of spite

"But you need me!" I scream

As it recoils from my skin

Yet, nothing crashes down 

Or collapses, as I did

The world goes on spinning

Without a connection to bleed

It mocks the brunt of my burden

Now that I'm free

  

Reviews

[Tasha.Marie]

You have revealed emotion with very good choice of words and exceptional rhythm/rhyme. Great work and thanks for sharing!

[emipoemi]

The only critique I can give this is that "ensnare" is a verb, and you have it serving as a noun here, which is not correct.....that and the factor of certain lines just on the cusp of being musically iffy are the only aspects that make this poem shy of being tuned to perfection. Well done overall!

[oursong2]

This is amazing! All of the emotions you felt while writing this jumped off the page! It gave me chills and made my heart pump! Fantastic job!