Me VS my heart

another quarrel with the heart

Now I've got to step on my heart....
And squeeze really hard....
For your love to go out....no other reason I have...there is no doubt...
For the love to step aside....
And keep my heart left behind.....
.
Lost again....
Looking for care, passion, sympathy....
Everywhere....anywhere...
My heart pleads to me...
Am so weak..save me....
Its not your first...nor your last...
My fooled heart...endure it..and gather your scattered parts.....
.
.
There is no use....
You have no excuse...
You're so afraid....it's love...here I said....
Oh my dear heart....finally I learned to sane....
I don't want you broken again....
You've chosen this?
So don't blame me...for the plague I'll bring on....
Because its not yet done....
And the rain is still to come

Reviews

[Jack...]

Hauntingly beautiful. To speak to the heart, wonderful.

Oh my dear heart....finally I learned to sane....
I don't want you broken again....

Beautiful, simply lovely. You do not cease to amaze me with your fragrant flow of words and phrases. I am enchanted.

[Dalia]

you always fill my heart with joy with your kind reviews
thank you so much :)

[Deron Alexis]

wonderful relatable concept here Dalia it seemed like an actual argument and struggling within deep writing keep it up

[Dalia]

big thanks my friend Deron
its been a while :)

[Deron Alexis]

true too long

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

oh heart alarming ! well that's a fact ...heart chooses this herself ,and then heart breaks, and heart regrets...but still not sure whether it's going to end that soon!
nicely put.

[Dalia]

thank you Ayaz for your review

[Chris]

emotionally full and builds well. I feel I fully understand what you are saying though the language usage is a little rough-edged.

[Dalia]

I am still working on my writing skills, i hope my next would be more smooth
thank you Chris, always you give constructive reviews, appreciate it :)

[Chris]

you have the ideas...polish comes with practice, usage, and time.


Line 1 - "Now I got to step on my heart...." - "I got to" OR I've got to OR I have to...

polish

[Dalia]

you are right
I need more practice indeed
I'll consider the change
thanks again, you've been very helpful

[Chris]

that was just one example... I readily understood your thought but polishing fits.

[Dalia]

would love to hear your opinion on my writes always Chris

[Ohhhwillow]

Gorgeous imagery here, how tender the heart truly is, though wiser it becomes as you learn to both tame and understand it. This is lovely

[Dalia]

that's right :)
glad you liked it Willow

[BL]

A battle rages within as you come to terms with your emotions you have described so well.

[Dalia]

thank you Bluely

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A lovely tale of the struggles with the emotion of love and loss.

[Dalia]

thank you John.
always joyed to see your review on my writes :)

[. - .]

Love is very... Difficult.
We (one point or another) are all scared of it, because we know we may get hurt.
Beautiful poem :))

[Dalia]

Exactly!
glad you liked it :)

[Annabelle Lee]

I got lost a few times, I'm not sure if you intended that or if it is just me. But either way... the grammar was great in this one

[Dalia]

May be I felt so while writing,
glad to know my grammar better here
thank you ^^

[Purplerose]

I felt your soul with this. Beautiful! :)

[Dalia]

thanks my lovely friend ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the "sane" line...

but now i am going off my rocker and falling in love again...how about a little more squeezing, my heart?

cool write.

kind of that "should i? or shouldn't i?"

[Dalia]

exactly, liked this review, thank you Jacob.