Amazing, Graceless

To the double-edged sword of life and love.

My brightest night,

My blackest day.

With every breath I scream your name.

 

Lead me by the hand,

Rip my expectations under.

Help me to understand,

Enticed and left in wonder.

 

Pulling away,

No, pull me closer.

You know I can't stay,

I know it's already over.

 

Angelic, unyielding,

Lost to the feeling.

Sweet secret-keeper,

You beckon me deeper.

 

A whisper screaming down my spine.

Waves of rapture blurring my sight.

A moment lingered on your lips.

Cascading from your fingertips.

 

Breathe life into this heart of dust.

The night will make a place for us.

I cannot but I know must.

I cannot but I must.

I must.

Author's Note

There are two sides to everything - when it comes to matters of the heart, that notion feels even more extreme. Something like... angels and devils wrestling? Sweet catharsis and bitter guilt struggling to inhabit the same vessel? Life is strange, sometimes ;)

Reviews

[Shy Girl]

I agree with you in your note. Two sides to EVERYTHING!! I hate that ;) Why can't it just be the right side...mine ;) lololol Anyway, back to your poem...I loved how you went back and forth on view points... but the way you manuvered them on the page captured me the most...they aren't quite even in relativity to eachother.. lends its self to a, dare I say, check list rattled off from one side to the other. It also gives you a clue how to travel back and forth... loved it... and this part

"Breathe life into this heart of dust."

Fell in love with that line right there... just love the wording ... if the heart were dust... you would just be scattering the ashes with each breath you exhale. :) Damn that was just chilling... :)

[Jb]

This is breath taking!

[Perfect Mistake]

Intersting format. Love the fighting back and forth, creates an amazing thing to read. Anyway good work :3

[ChaoticSoul]

Oh goodness this is clever! It makes me want to shower you in flowers and hugs and all things wonderful because I adore cleverness. The emotion is written so well it is practically tangible. Like I can reach out and feel the two different sides fighting for independence from one another. Just brilliant!

[R J Askew]

Great stuff. It reads like a duet. As you say two sides to everything. But must one always win? Often yes. i have just been watching THE VOICE on BBC. I saw people singing their lives out against a rival. Only one wld win. The winners were ecstatic and the losers were clearly broken. I like the execution of your poem here and unlike the TV judges refuse to say which side is best. Of course they are part of the whole. Life is strange always! it is actually a very, very, very odd experience and one we NEVER understand at any point. Never. We never understand this thing that is in us and which we are in ... for but a moment. And then it is gone. And so are we, and all those o so important matters with us. Sigh. I love the poem cos is makes me feel alive, trapped in a maze.

[Thea]

Aw...That creativity, great work! Such a wonderfully penned piece...Well done!
:)))

[Bats In The Belfry]

Oh My...this is tormentingly beautiful!