Long Distance

Felt like writing...

What ever happened

To love standing

Through the

Test of time?

Distance, I thought

Distance didn't matter

Because my heart

My heart is with you

Yet you let

This long distance

Be the reason

For being unfaithful

Author's Note

What do you think? Did I overuse distance? Thanks if you review.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

i think you used distance in the right proportions, some repetition is good to get your emphasis across to the reader, you didn't overdo it. one thing i know though, if someone is going to cheat on you, distance does make it easier but, they are a cheater in their heart, so...they would have cheated anyway. this is a terrific write.

[Tasha]

thank you quinn your reviews always make me smile, you are so sweet. thanks again :)

[quinfinn]

you are a good writer, honey. always happy to read you....

[Tasha]

aww thanks quinn...

[Rye]

I like this write, perfect the way it is.

[Death Girl]

I do not think that you over used distance. i liked this. cheaters are always going to cheat and they are not worth your time. some people just don't know how to be faithful to one person and one person only.

[Tasha]

Thank you, I appreciate it.

[Natalie]

I really enjoyed this and I think I enjoy it all the more since I went through that myself somewhat. Great work.

[Tasha]

Ank you

[s y e]

I dont think 'distance' is overused. You've got it all right, its great.
I guess being in a long distance relationship does make cheating a lot easier but thats where you have to have gained there trust, and once they break your trust, dont let them back cause they'll do it again.

Amazing write.

[Tasha]

Nk,NHaT you And

[s y e]

What

[Tasha]

Sorry my phone does that...thank you!

[s y e]

haha, welcome

[Tasha]

Haha :) thanks again

[Ahmad Cox]

Hey I dont think that distance is overused and I think that it expressed the feelings behind the poem well.

[Tasha]

Thanks Ahmad, I appreciate it.

[Ahmad Cox]

No problem. I always appreciate getting the chance to read new poems of yours

[Tasha]

Aww thanks