The Edge

I'm on the edge

with you

hanging on by a thread

trying to keep what we had..

I'm slipping..

catch me..

hold me..

I don't want to loose you

we're about to fall

I hate being on the edge

with you

because you let us fall apart

Author's Note

I hope you like it.

Reviews

[kymee]

nice poem. I've been on the edge too and that is quite uncomfortable.Did you both let it fall apart?you were doing all the work in the beginning of the poem. your choice was to get out or get off instead you both let it go. Could be expanded a bit, but necessary, thanks for letting me read your poem and stay off that edge

[Not Available]

I like this, simple and to the point. Beautiful :)

[Sam]

This is very good :)

[J Todd Underhill]

For being a shorter piece I liked the rawness, the bearing of the soul with this one. it made me feel like I did when I was one the edge with my marriage

[Libby]

I really liked this, something about it made it feel like you were holding on to the edge of the cliff breathing out some last words. c:

[guiltyascharged]

Awww, this is sweet. I hate not knowing if he'll be there, or if he'll break it up or not. Very sweet and good job.

[Berto]

This is honest writing. You express how invested you are, but the other person isn't.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Excellent use of imagery!

[Jeremy Baker]

Nice imagery - you call out for safety when you feel in danger. Nice job!

[kdpgrahi]

It is a reflection of the journey through life, you will feel on the edge always and somebody is ready to let you fall apart. It is to make yourself strong enough not to be affected by others' company or anything like that. One is always single no body is around to save from falling. I like the poem very much, with its well structured flow etc.

[Inyourshadow]

I'm slipping..
catch me..
hold me..
I don't want to loose you

Love the feeling of this piece though loose should it be lose you. I love how you pen your need to be loved in so few powerful lines. Very nicely writtenespecially the ending, keep em' coming