My Secret Lover

My Secret Lover

A Poem by Tasha
"

Can you guess my lover?

"
A secret love
that's soon discovered
all because of the things
you do to me

You caress my legs
and let out a sweet
whisper in my ears

You wrap yourself
around me
and never let go

You hold me close
because you don't want
anyone to know
that you are my
secret lover...

I love how you've
kept your cover,
but not for long
you cute little kitty
you...

Charcoal  <3

© 2011 Tasha


Author's Note

 Tasha
Pyrokitty24 gave me the idea about a cat and this is about our neighborhood cat Charcoal. This is Charcoal in the picture.

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Thoughts: I'd guess you are the lover, but interestingly I get the impression the point of view shifts from Charcoal to you. In the first 4 stanzas, it all sounds like Charcoal's point of view, but in the last few lines of the 5th stanza I get the feeling that it's from your point of view. I like this one especially since it's your interpretation of someone else's point of view.

Constructive Criticism: None, I liked the poem so much that there wasn't anything I could find to critic on it. The mystery of who is the lover draws my interest.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I was gonna guess me but I never bothered. But I like how the focus shifted between you n Charcoal.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicely penned. Lucie

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love it :) reading it out it loud made it seem like the emotions were running off my tongue as i spoke these words. Well Done :) x

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i enjoyed the poem and emotions expressed, good job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the way you wrote the poem. I like the photo of the cat also. Animals can receive more love then we give to family and friends. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aww i love kitties, my cat may not like me that much but she still rocks and id be sad if anything were to happen to her!! Really loved this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

To be honest, the title and the picture threw me off for a moment. I wasn't sure what to expect, but it was adorable in the end. I have two loving cats myself and know what its like to feel their love and to love them.
Thanks for sharing.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved it, it was adorable xD I don't even know what else to say except clever idea, and that I enjoyed it haha

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cute cat and very good...

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very clever poem, you trickster!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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