Dancing In The Moonlight

Dancing In The Moonlight

A Poem by Tasha
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Everybody's dancing in the moonlight...

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They took the long way home
On the night of their anniversary
To stop and smell the roses
In the middle of Central Park,

He takes her hand
And leads her into a dance
That's warm and full of love 
They don't need music
To dance in the moonlight
Because they stir music and desire
In each other 

As they sway to the beat within,
They look up in the sky to see
An orbit of memories 
Encircling them as they dance
The moon shines bright
As they look into each other's eyes
She smiles at him and says 
"I love you,"
He smiles with pride
And continues to dance
Because he had a surprise for her;

He reaches into his pocket
And pulls out a box, 
Could it be what she thinks it is?
He kneels down before her and asks
"Will you marry me?"
She says yes,
And they hugged,
And kissed
While dancing the night away in the moonlight

© 2011 Tasha


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 Tasha
First attempt at creating a story within a poem. Please be nice.

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Story created- a love story. At first I thought those two were an old married couple, still in love, but when I read the marriage proposal part I could envision their love lasting that long. All the details come alive, and really paint a picture. This poem touches the heart.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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this is amazing. a very good effort it is canching in the firt line...

Posted 10 Years Ago


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This is a good effort. I can visualize the scene, it reminds me of something like a scene in the film 'stardust'
Keep it up

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I like some of the imagery here, for example, "They look up in the sky to see/ An orbit of memories/ Encircling them as they dance" That is a nice picture.

My only complaint is that sometimes the tenses don't match up. You say "They TOOK the long way home" (past tense) but then say "He TAKES her hand" (present tense). I think to make a more coherent poem, it needs to be all past tense or all present tense.

Overall, a sweet little poem. :-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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For a first attempt, I love it. I thought it was so sweet and the story played like a song I could listen to again. Again, your writing power is very strong at a young age :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it....... ^^, the sweetness made me feel good.....

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I won't be nice I'm afraid, I'll be honest. It's terrific/ I love the simplicity, the sweetness, the form and the flow. It made me feel good, and has left me with a smile on my face. I loved it.
And that's the honesty.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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:) It's beautiful! :) Love it. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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very nice. worded wonderfully

Posted 11 Years Ago


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ahhh central park. loved it all.

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aaaaw!:)*sigh* how cute!!! love the poem !:)

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