Suicidal thoughts

Suicidal thoughts

A Poem by Daniel Gardner
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Not much else I can say

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Here I am gasping for air
Hard to believe I am trying to stand back on the chair
I thought this would be quick
I thought this would be Shameless
But here I am struggling to change this
My life has been pain
Always ending in rain
I can't imagine how long this is taking
 My life flash images like a painting
I can feel my lungs clasping now
 The images show me I should be proud
I came a long way since that day
My life wasn't rotting away
I shade tears of love
Tears of hate
To think my life is ending over a plate
An argument over things as of late
My eyes roll back as I start to faint
Finally I go numb
I did this for my wife's sake.

© 2010 Daniel Gardner


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Daniel Gardner
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What a horror this piece is
I have read so many horrors but this one is different and stands out.
It is very sad to hear about how dreadful life can be
I could not say good bye to your soul no matter how bad life is
I will always believe there is life inside you

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Posted 12 Years Ago


Such a creepy picture!
I like the write as well it digs into the heart of you.
Feelings are expressed well and written well.
I like this.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 12 Years Ago


Suicide a touchy subject. I lost two brothers to suicide. Always better to find reason and purpose to stay alive. Poem is powerful. Picture made poem stronger. The description and detail was very good. Ending was sad. Death isn't as sweet. Most reach out and beg for more life. A excellent poem. You made me think. Goal of the writer.
Coyote


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Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow, honestly hard hitting Daniel. These thoughts are not easy to voice, this is excellent xx

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Posted 12 Years Ago



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Monroe, GA



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I'm an inspiring writer that has a million and ten thoughts running through his head all day. I joined this site because my wife inspired me to. I was not prepared for the thoughts to jump out so much.. more..

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