Suicidal thoughts

Not much else I can say

Here I am gasping for air
Hard to believe I am trying to stand back on the chair
I thought this would be quick
I thought this would be Shameless
But here I am struggling to change this
My life has been pain
Always ending in rain
I can't imagine how long this is taking
But my life flash images like a painting
I can feel my lungs clasping now
But the images show me I should be proud
I came a long way since that day
My life wasn't rotting away
I shade tears of love
Tears of hate
To think my life is ending like this over a plate
An argument over things as of late
My eyes roll back as I start to faint
Finally I go numb
I did this for my wife's sake.

Author's Note

Not much else I can say. Review, Rate, Comment

Reviews

[Deanna]

Very good and very dark. Like it a lot.

[Ashley Black]

very good write. it has a nice undertone of feeling. good job.

[Marlena]

This kind of made me think, I mean, it's obvious what it's about but I'm finding a lot of different meanings. I like the last line.

[Eric Cox]

A very creatively done poem about suiciding. Nicely penned.

[Jennika has a short att..]

First off, I flippin LOVE the picture! :D I believe the other reviewers did well as the 'review' part, so Imma just ramble.

The images show me I should be proud
I came a long way since that day
My life wasn't rotting away - This was definatley my favorite lines. It spoke to me, ya know? Anywho nice job(:

[deadly healer]

i agree with shattered tears. im sure this piece is inspiring as any other you write. i can definately relate myself and have had these thoughts cross my mind before i realize what im thinking. but i have been here.

[Kristen]

I think many of us have been at this point before, very easy to relate to indeed. Nice work.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This is a very sad piece...I have been to the point of wanting to die, but haven't...I don't want to hurt anybody...thanks for sharing... :(

[JENY]

I think it is…..
“Shed tears…..”
Nice creation…….
But I think….you do not bother about….
Poetic beauty…I mean rhyming…and all that….cant you try…?
You express everything…in a touching way….

[HorrorMaster]

Wow very good horror piece. I understand how you feel. Very sad, you shouldn't never thought about suicide.