Suicidal thoughts

Suicidal thoughts

A Poem by Daniel Gardner
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Not much else I can say

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Here I am gasping for air
Hard to believe I am trying to stand back on the chair
I thought this would be quick
I thought this would be Shameless
But here I am struggling to change this
My life has been pain
Always ending in rain
I can't imagine how long this is taking
But my life flash images like a painting
I can feel my lungs clasping now
But the images show me I should be proud
I came a long way since that day
My life wasn't rotting away
I shade tears of love
Tears of hate
To think my life is ending like this over a plate
An argument over things as of late
My eyes roll back as I start to faint
Finally I go numb
I did this for my wife's sake.

© 2010 Daniel Gardner


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Daniel Gardner
Not much else I can say. Review, Rate, Comment



Reviews

Very good and very dark. Like it a lot.

Posted 9 Years Ago


very good write. it has a nice undertone of feeling. good job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This kind of made me think, I mean, it's obvious what it's about but I'm finding a lot of different meanings. I like the last line.

Posted 12 Years Ago


A very creatively done poem about suiciding. Nicely penned.

Posted 12 Years Ago


First off, I flippin LOVE the picture! :D I believe the other reviewers did well as the 'review' part, so Imma just ramble.

The images show me I should be proud
I came a long way since that day
My life wasn't rotting away - This was definatley my favorite lines. It spoke to me, ya know? Anywho nice job(:

Posted 12 Years Ago


i agree with shattered tears. im sure this piece is inspiring as any other you write. i can definately relate myself and have had these thoughts cross my mind before i realize what im thinking. but i have been here.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I think many of us have been at this point before, very easy to relate to indeed. Nice work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a very sad piece...I have been to the point of wanting to die, but haven't...I don't want to hurt anybody...thanks for sharing... :(

Posted 12 Years Ago


I think it is…..
“Shed tears…..”
Nice creation…….
But I think….you do not bother about….
Poetic beauty…I mean rhyming…and all that….cant you try…?
You express everything…in a touching way….


This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow very good horror piece. I understand how you feel. Very sad, you shouldn't never thought about suicide.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 12 Years Ago



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I'm an inspiring writer that has a million and ten thoughts running through his head all day. I joined this site because my wife inspired me to. I was not prepared for the thoughts to jump out so much.. more..

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