These Hands

Just felt like writing this one. No real reason though.

These hands of mine are rough and rugged
They can Protect or destroy
They can create works of Joy
These hands of mine are dangerous in every way
They are tools to break hearts
They are tools of war
They write lovely poetry
They make wonderful motions
These hands of mine can cause a lot of joy
These hands of mine aren't meant to be a toy
They incite ones to suicide
They conduct melodies with my bride
These hands of mine have committed many crimes
They can batter to protect my pride
They can make anyone cry
These hands of mine aren't meant for you
Not even for me
These hands of mine have helped me cheat
What can I say I use my hands everyday
Won't you come and see
That these hands of mine are unique

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ashley Black]

loved it. as usual you write some of my favorite poetry. it's truly amazing.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Like the metaphoric language used in this one...Glad that I got to meet your hands...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sunflower

[Jessica Mai]

I like the last lines, sums it all up. This is a good write Daniel.

[Marlena]

I like the conflicting ideas in this. Well done :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this was very deep. I think it is good though. I really like it a lot. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Sasha]

This is a great piece on the versatility of hands. I found the "Not even for me" line interesting because if your hands aren't meant for me or you, who are they meant for? Also, I liked the "What can I say I use my hands everyday" line because it rhymes and is amusing in its own right. I should certainly hope so.

[<3 Simply Rebekah <3]

I love the way you presented your poem at the beginning,
"These hands of mine are rough and rugged
They can Protect or destroy
They can create works of Joy
These hands of mine are dangerous in every way"
It showed vividly how your hands are,
and really set it up nicely

I think you should cut out the last line though,
we know your hands are unique because you have described them so well,
that and I think the line
"Won't you come and see"
would leave the reader with a nice thoughtful ending.
Just an idea though!

Great Poem!!!

[lrigD]

It was good, I always like these things that make people aware of things they otherwise just take for granted =)

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

A very interesting provoking but yet i love it very Unique, i love these lines.

They conduct melodies with my bride


These hands of mine aren't meant for you
Not even for me

Won't you come and see
That these hands of mine are unique

[Jennika has a short att..]

You know what else you use everyday? Your mouth, but it wouldn't be possible without your brain to tell you what to do or your heart beating.
Yeah I know, random, but it felt smart until I typed it. I like it, it made me think and Iike it.