Symptoms

Symptoms

A Poem by Daniel Gardner
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Just came to mind.

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These Are the signs

That it is time
Not to go home
Not to die
But just to change your life.

Do you get hot and then cold?
Do you feel that you are all alone?
Brain freezes and emo twitches?

Do you feel ever once in a while,
It is getting to hard to smile?
You sleep longer?
You stay to the dark?

You fail every test you take?
But you never seem to take a break?
You always seem to be late?

What is the things that make you scream?
I think it is time to change
That way to small ring.
The cloths that never seem to let you breath.

A time for change it is.

Feel free to learn to live.
If you can't take your own pain.
Maybe its time to not feel shame.

Live for someone else.
Live to learn to never let love rest.
How can you take away love,
When you never want to control it?

Stand and live for tomorrow.
Never for today.
Never live to stay away.
Embrace the love others everyday.
Never forget to feel.

Loving is in us.
Loving is given to us.
Never forget to trust in love.
Never forget how love can heal us.

© 2010 Daniel Gardner


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Daniel Gardner
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it was good. u do have alot of lines that make it very hard to focus on the poems meaning, like it is rushed or maybe that it seems to drift. this was good for something that has just come into your head. i have many of those poems myself. all in all, not a bad write.
-deadly healer

Posted 10 Years Ago


I really like it, but it does feel a little rushed.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This was a good write. I feel that you have a lot of emotions in the piece. And that everyone needs to change eventually, but they can change in a blink of an eye. It takes time for the person to change. They can just bounce to being their same old selves again. Then they just go back to that depressed state they were in before. If you know what I mean. I have seen this in myself. This was very nicely done though. That is what I get from the piece anyway. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Look, this is a very good theme…
But it seems you have written in haste…
I feel if you wrote it taking enough time…
It would have been more beautiful…
The lines carry…very meaningful thoughts….
A good theme…



Posted 10 Years Ago


Love of all things are necessary. Men and woman blinded by hate will have a limited view on life and dreams. I like the complete poem. Last lines are true and necessary for a good life. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


amazing write you Captured this piece Quit well.
this line is amazing love it Thoes lines are so very true Just lke it's harder to Hate and Easyer to love cause it's just how we are no matter how much it hurts the love is so much more Wonderful to feel then any thing !

Loving is in us.
Loving is given to us.
Never forget to trust in love.
Never forget how love can heal us.



Posted 10 Years Ago


OMGz man this is a really really good write!!!!
I can totally relate!!!
I really enjoyed these lines:
"A time for change it is.
Feel free to learn to live.
If you can't take your own pain.
Maybe its time to not feel shame."

"Do you feel ever once in a while,
It is getting to hard to smile?"

and lastly...

"Stand and live for tomorrow.
Never for today.
Never live to stay away.
Embrace the love others everyday.
Never forget to feel.

Loving is in us.
Loving is given to us.
Never forget to trust in love.
Never forget how love can heal us."
Thanks man beautiful write!!!!!!!!!!!
BTW I kinda wanted to cry reading it,
thanks I need that :)
you got some powerful words there,
don't let it go! :P :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I thought this was pretty good.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like this a lot:) I like the turn around, the essence of life captured in the vital moment!
Its almost like an instruction leaflet of how to overcomne depression, I don't mean that in a negative way either lol Its unique, love it!
xx

Posted 10 Years Ago


Hmm, it seems you can target all audiences with just a thought, that's amazing. I dunno if you meant 'cloths' as in 'clothes' or not so-yeah. Great poem, it "speaks" to me, and I effin love the picture, even though I've seen it like 4 and a half times on here already. Keep up the great work; off to the next poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Daniel Gardner
Daniel Gardner

Monroe, GA



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