The Drifter

The Drifter

A Poem by Daniel Gardner
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Something I thought of at work.

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Don't be alarmed.

Don't be scared.
I know its not fair,
But I can't tell you who I am.

Although you seen me many times before.
Staring at you from afar.
I even saw you when you brought your first car.

But rejoice that you have not truly seen me!
For in the day you do your life will retreat.
Be glad you do not know my true name.
But I tell you I am the being of fame.

I am what makes the dogs bark at night,
The chilling wolfs howl.
I am the midnight lions roar,

I am more silent then the night,
More deadly then a venomous snake bite.
I am what drives a person insane in war.
I am a salesmen without a quota.

Do you still want to know my name?
I assure you I cannot be tamed!
If you must know then read my words carefully,
And pray you do not meet me.

© 2010 Daniel Gardner


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Daniel Gardner
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This is good, but you need to do a little damage control. "Wolves" not "wolfs" and "although you seen me" should be "although you have/you've seen me" and the line, "I am a salesman without a quota" is a little corny for this kind of poem, and kind of takes it down a little. Try coming up with something a little better for that line (I'm sure you can). Aside from those few things, this is good. Nice work

Posted 10 Years Ago


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I like the eerieness maintained throughout and the final line, that really punches at you and creates a vision of that meeting lol
Great poem hon
xx

Posted 10 Years Ago


very creative...kinda creepy. but i think that's the mood you were going for lol, uhm..but it was well written and flowed pretty well. i thought that the fourth stanza (the on that begins with "i am what makes the dogs bark at night") kinda chopped it up a bit because it was three lines instead of the four... the second stanza was only three lines as well, but that one seemed to work out well. anyway, great work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is good. I think it was awesome. My favorite stanza is the last one, but the whole poem was awesome. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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ahh death i dont want to meet you yet...nice writing "I am what drives a person insane in war" i liked that line

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Daniel Gardner
Daniel Gardner

Monroe, GA



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