Forever

 

Gently

I sink into you

My once strong exterior

Now coddled like a child

Within your arms

Seemingly helpless

I am safe

 

Gradually

My heart quickens

As I feel your essence

Engulfing me

An energy like nothing else

I have ever known

Joy is home 

 

Softly

You touch my cheek

A single stroke of your hand

Sends shivers through my soul

My pulse races

As I try desperately to preserve

This moment

 

Quietly

I weep tears of joy

For the moment that I am in

And I weep tears of sorrow

For the moment that will end

I just want to lay here in your arms

Forever

Reviews

[ElJays Nicholas]

The essence of you shines in this, Dani! It reaches out and embraces us with tenderness and delight. I think, anyone who has experienced such moments can find the beauty in this and can relate to how fleeting such moments can be, and the desire to "stay like this forever." I certainly can relate :) Much love to you, beautiful lady.....

[universalove]

this is the most special thing in life that two people can share. each others magnificent beauty. i love the way you write. your poems enlighten me. really good.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

Wow! I had this explained to me once by one of "your half of the population" and never really got it ... until now. You wrote this near flawlessly. I was especially impressed by the line:

"Sends shivers through my soul"

As I read that line, I anticipated that the last word would be "spine" but it was not. It was "soul", a place so much deeper than the mere limits of the "spine" which is only part of the physical being.

I would have preferred to see punctuation. You see, you wrote the poem, so you know how it is supposed to sound. Without punctuation, we must guess where the stops and pauses are. When we must struggle to know how to read a poem, that takes away some of the joy of reading it. But beyond that, I've no complaints. Every word perfectly chosen and fitted into it's perfect place, no words out of place, not a superfluous word to be found.

Lovely!

[Michael X]

transpiring emotional rendering with soft hue, romantically fantasized with a warm descriptive flow.
very nice way of expressing words in essense of passion, as this writing describes what it means to
use detail effectively, using such reflective descriptions like gently, gradually, softly, quetly, give
the vision a peaceul lullying effect, as such, your phrases are spoken like soft whispers, with delving
thought in developing the matter of being consumed by a loving, surrendering emotion, thanks.

[Arthur Henn]

Gang there is nothing going on between (Dani and I) this is just me and the way I write, She is a wonderful writer and this is what her words inspired.

Thank you Dani for a wonderful poem
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This night's breeze flows in and around you
The soft touch of ones skin
Is out of reach

Lost and out of reach
Longing to embrace
Each others souls

Your arms are always open
And full of love
Your heart is always quick
And ready to love

Nothing better,
The warmth of souls,
Love flowing
Among wild flowers

Serenading the warmth of
An early morning sunrise
A moment in time
Lasting forever

Arthur Henn

[GraceKelly1974]

WOW! I thoroughly enjoyed this. I can relate to it and my favorite lines are: "My once strong exterior Now coddled like a child" Awesome.

[Mel Stevens]

Wow. So much emotion in so few words. Love it. It makes me think back to when my husband and I first started dating, and everything was new. :)

[Pikkakard]

I just caught one of the comments below mine... breathtaking is definitely apt for this piece. You are an amazing writer. So creative. A beautiful choice of words

[Nely Amorim]

Gently
Gradually
Softly
Quietly.... this piece moved me... it's breathtaking...

[David W Is Searching Hi..]

Wow you have just conveyed human emotions so well in this. I mean, brings back many feelings/ nostalgic times of love that are just normally so hard to capture. I like the way it flows...I'm just a man for the flow I guess but I really do like it. Seems to go from being something timeless to something that sooner or later will end which makes it kind of sad for me. Brilliant.

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

verrrrrry sad, but touching.... i wish i could just let precious moments last forever.... it was just so sweet and sorrowful.... i just love how you can let the reader know exactly what you're saying... your poems say what others can't get out...awesome!!!!!

~may