Watercolors

Watercolors

A Poem by Dani California

 

  

Watercolors

Run carelessly off of your canvas

Onto the floor

Creating a slippery surface

Where others may fall.

 

Blind

To what lies beneath their feet

Following only your words

Through an array of tainted colors

To the pictures you’ve painted.

 

Victim

Is the signature you’ve scribbled

Depicted on all of your paintings

Though each held a different portrait

The same final outcome is displayed.

 

Deceit

Is what hangs in your gallery

Your fans huddled around in denial

Seemingly oblivious to the similarities

The same strokes, repeated. 

 

Liar 

Is what you’ve named them

Throwing spilled paint over truth

Leaving others to soil their shoes

In the mess you’ve created.

 

 

 

 

© 2010 Dani California


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I like this and I like the way you've used colors to express the idea of a painting. The poem itself is painfully true of someone I know, but far better worded than I could have done! I think I like this stanza best, although the whole poem resonates deeply.

Victim
Is the signature you've scribbled
Depicted on all of your paintings
Though each held a different portrait
The same final outcome is displayed.

Great job, as usual!


Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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The same strokes repeated...like making the same mistakes in life over and over again..A trifle hard to follow until read through a few times..A novel way to express your self..God bless...Valentine

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice job!!

I like how you incorporate different text colors to mirror your concept in this poem of art. And how you used one word in each paragraph, and expounded on that in each paragraph. Unique, and a very special poem. I haven't read one like this yet, and that is a GOOD thing!

keep it up.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This piece is one that I know all to well, not from others only but sometimes the person I am...too... this one made me think and I loved the innocent concept, that has been tainted. Great work...as always!

Love,
Janice Ann

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Attack by the colors of life, in the form of water colors. Uniquely penned with painting a world of beauty yet leaving a slippery mess for others to slip on. covering up lies with painted truths.

Creative and well penned as usual Dani.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I have never quite seen it described this way, in color. It is usually some drab mix of shades of gray, written with as much plastic feeling as the writer could manage from something they overheard at a Starbuck's. This is a great write of a not-so great topic. Course, I have to run off - I have more glasses in my pictures to paint... :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Well, I have been attending receptions in artgalleries in the past and have been a spectator of many speaches being made about art, eloquently spoken, but often quite the opposite of what the artist intended it to be.
Afterwards the spectators would try to speak to the artists present, coming to the conclusion that what was being said was mere a good marketing speach!
You have used your colours well and for me the last stanza says it all: liars!
Eager liars wanting to belong, but with no imagination of their own...
I really appreciated this!

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

a really good write, Dani...it conveys the truth of the matters at heart. what is done by one, can affect others and not always in a positive way. one can never know...but sometimes they do and it is still done despite the knowledge.

love the use of colors and the descriptors...good job as always my friend.... :)

Amanda oxo

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Gasping for air Dani... Truly a powerful piece with creative metaphors... Theme is incredibly
intense. I felt you in this one lady! Love the colors and the words that you singled out....
Grippingly creative... Sensationally profound...

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Sounds like a politician instead of a painter. Well done. I like the color scheme as well.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I like this and I like the way you've used colors to express the idea of a painting. The poem itself is painfully true of someone I know, but far better worded than I could have done! I think I like this stanza best, although the whole poem resonates deeply.

Victim
Is the signature you've scribbled
Depicted on all of your paintings
Though each held a different portrait
The same final outcome is displayed.

Great job, as usual!


Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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