Watercolors

Watercolors

A Poem by Dani California

 

  

Watercolors

Run carelessly off of your canvas

Onto the floor

Creating a slippery surface

Where others may fall.

 

Blind

To what lies beneath their feet

Following only your words

Through an array of tainted colors

To the pictures you’ve painted.

 

Victim

Is the signature you’ve scribbled

Depicted on all of your paintings

Though each held a different portrait

The same final outcome is displayed.

 

Deceit

Is what hangs in your gallery

Your fans huddled around in denial

Seemingly oblivious to the similarities

The same strokes, repeated. 

 

Liar 

Is what you’ve named them

Throwing spilled paint over truth

Leaving others to soil their shoes

In the mess you’ve created.

 

 

 

 

© 2010 Dani California


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I like this and I like the way you've used colors to express the idea of a painting. The poem itself is painfully true of someone I know, but far better worded than I could have done! I think I like this stanza best, although the whole poem resonates deeply.

Victim
Is the signature you've scribbled
Depicted on all of your paintings
Though each held a different portrait
The same final outcome is displayed.

Great job, as usual!


Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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this is odd.... I like it. Haha i enjoyed your choice of words!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AWESOME work, as always! I think this has got to be my favorite, it's so..good! lol. I love how you used water colors to describe everything..very nice work!

~Lauren

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the way you crafted this poem, a canvas of a masterpiece itself.

Art

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicely done. Great work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh this is different.
Watercolors
Run carelessly off of your canvas
Onto the floor
Creating a slippery surface
Where others fall.

I am baffled by your choice of words and wonder how you thought of
this unique piece. Is it a woman's thing? Blind, victim, deceit liar, how did you brilliantly
Grapple with colors and ingeniously have them running carelessly on the floor.
I like the colors...nice write Dani

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think you should keep them, on second thought, they aren't really distracting.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is mysterious. I like it. The different colors are a bit distracting, but they also add to the poem. Nice job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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