Unveiling

 

Secrets talk amongst themselves

Keeping me suspended,

Longing to hold you

In the dark.  

 

Do you sense my shadow

Behind your eyes,

Begging you to see

What I feel?  

 

I whisper to your mind

Come to me,

Hoping you will hear

Where to turn.  

 

Unknowingly, you search for me

While I wait,

My heart beats faster

Watching you crave.  

 

Hidden under your skin

I stay warm,  

Your pulse exciting me

As secrets unveil.

Author's Note

This is one of those... 'out of nowhere' writes. Not sure... hmm.

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

This poem, for some odd reason, messes with me. Perhaps it is the song that I am listening to right now as well, it is definitely the wrong song to be listening to while I read this...lol. This has that dreamy feel to it, not one of those little dream writes that we see here, but a sincere dreamy feel to it. There is an ethereal substance to it, that tugs in the dark - pulling - with softest unspoken whispers. This is truly an amazing piece, Dani... definitely going in the favs (I know that sounds so cliche, but I do not say it lightly)...

[dilettante1890]

Reminds me of nicole blackman. Have you ever read or heard of her?

[☮]

Erotic yet sinister. The image completes the picture. You advance with every new piece. Loved this one. I don't have much of an explanation. More of a feeling... an unexplainable one. I've enjoyed swimming in your deepness once again. Great work.

[TamiViolet]

Dani, I want to say that this is my very favorite piece from you. To be honest, I attempted to review several times but was unable to express my emotions regarding this mysteriously enticing verse. I just don't know what to say except that it's quite beautiful....soft yet so erotic... exciting to the pulse as is expressed in the final stanza. The photo in conjunction with sensual imagery is stunning! You have captured the yearning in a way that leaves much to the imagination. Incredible work!

[Pax Analog]

Enigmatic phantom longing. Erotic like a breeze and flickering candle flame. Will o' the wisp desire. Osmosis of other aura's mystery. Poignant dropped veils of the whispering breath.

[Angela]

Awww!! secret longings. Really sexy piece and full of meaning. Great Job!!

[Robert S. Samson]

I cant exactly put my finger on it, or why, but i really like this poem. And I'm not a poem person.

[JRB]

Love gained thru want and needs, drives away love, for love returned and given openly without desires, and finds its self in those moments of lost hope. Unfolds to you and you, your self will unfold to love. All that's falls before has fallen.

Jan/uisiom

[A Forsaken Dream]

i'm sorry if this is a weird comment, but I was just a little bit enticed =] the words had a very provocative property =]. I think it was well written =].

-James

[Angelic Darkness]

Love this one!! This is darkly erotic, and does beg of the senses;).
You can send me read requests my sweet...I do love your work:)

AD

[Legion]

I like the first four stanzas together. The last one is a good stanza, but it doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem to me. Perhaps more should be done between that last stanza and the rest of the poem or maybe change it a bit or drop it (although it is the essence of the title).