Unveiling

 

Secrets talk amongst themselves

Keeping me suspended,

Longing to hold you

In the dark.  

 

Do you sense my shadow

Behind your eyes,

Begging you to see

What I feel?  

 

I whisper to your mind

Come to me,

Hoping you will hear

Where to turn.  

 

Unknowingly, you search for me

While I wait,

My heart beats faster

Watching you crave.  

 

Hidden under your skin

I stay warm,  

Your pulse exciting me

As secrets unveil.

Author's Note

This is one of those... 'out of nowhere' writes. Not sure... hmm.

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

This poem, for some odd reason, messes with me. Perhaps it is the song that I am listening to right now as well, it is definitely the wrong song to be listening to while I read this...lol. This has that dreamy feel to it, not one of those little dream writes that we see here, but a sincere dreamy feel to it. There is an ethereal substance to it, that tugs in the dark - pulling - with softest unspoken whispers. This is truly an amazing piece, Dani... definitely going in the favs (I know that sounds so cliche, but I do not say it lightly)...

[T]

Wow! I loved it, D! It was a combination of both beautiful and chilling for me! Wonderfully penned girl! hugs

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

"Unveil"

what a nice word to expound on in the poem. I do that a lot too, think of an idea or word, and build upon it. Great poem, esp this part in the end:

"Hidden under your skin

I stay warm,

Your pulse exciting me

As you unveil."

That's sharp right there Dani. That's the line of champions. lol

kena

[Chris Willits]

A great piece of work. A nice way to end my day. I love the ending as well.

[Antony]

Wow!, that put chills up my spine. This stanza did it for me, a magnificent piece Dani.
Hidden under your skin
I stay warm,
Your pulse exciting me
As you unveil.

Antony

[Blue Sky]

I love these ones of yours, seeping
from the depths of your thoughts
quite brilliant bringing a sway of thoughts
into view, giving voice for the 'secrets',

Such a excellent piece!!

[Spoken]

it's those come out of nowhere poems that seem to be the most powerful. secret desire wanted to be the center of someone's world or attention, captivate their mind, and the thrill of realizing they want you just as bad.. brings back memories for me, and that's always good :) Excellent

[Marie]

Excellent write. Some of my best work comes outta nowhere, or dreams.

[Amanda]

what an awesome write...came out of nowhere, huh? to send the whisper to someone you want to be with is like sending a kiss on the wind....the suprise and the wonder to unveil....

nice!

A xox

[Loribeth215]

Wow.....!
This is awesome. I love this. It's haunting and passionate, too.
Unveil the hidden truths within.......