The Fourth of July

The Fourth of July

A Poem by Dannyisawriter

You and I were

You and I were an awesome blur

Like fireworks that went off too soon

And now I’m lost in the jungle too

It was like the 4th of July!

 

Do you, do you remember

Laying under the stars on that chilly September

I know you don’t

But forget, I definitely won’t

All the fun times

All the happy rhymes

They’re stuck in my mind

And this crooked present makes me rewind

To my favorite “what ifs”

Pleasant thoughts that provide a great whiff

 

Because you and I were

You and I were an awesome blur

Like fireworks that went off too soon

And now I’m lost in the jungle too

 

I wish I knew how much you really loved me

I wish I still cared enough to know

Because every time I think of you at night

It’s followed by the heaviest sigh

And flowing tears till the well runs dry

 

Because you and I were an awesome blur

Like fireworks that went off too soon

Now I’m lost in the jungle too

Just like the 4th of July! 

© 2015 Dannyisawriter


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The repetition makes this piece! A really well done job with this. Such emotion as this makes the most amazing art.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like the way you have used repetition in this poem, I feel it strengthens the message. Well written.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wistful look at happy memories. I especially like the lines: "Because you and I were; You and I were an awesome blur; Like fireworks that went off too soon"

Posted 9 Years Ago


You have written a nice song here that talks about remembering the fun times of the past. Fantastic job! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


It's a really good poem, the name reminded me of one of fall out boy song!
This is really good, great work on this one

Posted 9 Years Ago


Good write with a strong central image.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Listen to the song Fourth of July by Fall Out Boy. Your poem reminds me of it.. Nice job by the way! I really liked the emotion:) Also. thanks for reviewing some of my work! I really appreciate it! Oh and thanks for being so kind to me! I hope we can be friends. I see your from PA! So am I :) How old are you might I ask?

Posted 9 Years Ago


Cool Girl

9 Years Ago

Thanks:) I keep changing it xD
Dannyisawriter

9 Years Ago

LOL I'm too lazy to change mine :P
Cool Girl

9 Years Ago

xD I like yours

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Added on January 31, 2015
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Any way to use my imagination is my favorite pass time, and writing is my favorite way to express myself. I am unashamed to claim to be a Christian. And I hope that my writing will somehow be a positi.. more..

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