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For the Girls

For the Girls

A Poem by justdandy
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Inspired by Bri'janae Aubrey

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This is for the Girls.

The girls that are like me


The girls that dress up like Princesses and dance the night away.

The girls that, have the whole world weighed on their shoulders since age 6.

The ones that sprout for an upper class.

But sometimes they are afraid.


This for the teenage girls.


The teenage girls that go through hard times.

The ones who get the drama attack,

You know who you are.

The ones that are hard to grow up with


This is for the Young women.


The women that turn 5, once they have to face a crowd.

But in reality they are 21.

The young women that are determined.

The young women who get cheated.

The ones that can't find their true love.


This is for the Wives.


The ones that finally found their true love.

The ones that try to be perfect.

The wives that try to please their husbands.


This is for the Mothers.


The ones that endured pain.

The Mothers that would give their lives

for that one rebellious child.

The Mothers that had seen their babies go away

to college, other countries, other better homes.


This is for the Girls.

This is for the Teenage Girls.

 This is for the Young Women.

  This is for the Women.

   The is for the Wives.

    This is for the Mothers.

     This is for the Girls.

      The Girls, that are like me.

© 2015 justdandy


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Hilo~ I really loooove this empowerment vibe I'm getting here~ What a powerful message!

But I am also here to make your poem flow better, so I am going to be brutally honest with some things~ Let's start~!

The girls that, have the whole world weighed on their shoulders since age 6.
-- rewrite this saying "The girls that have the whole world weighed on their shoulders since age six." Minor edits, but nonetheless~

But sometimes they are afraid.
-- I don't know if I'm just dumb, but who is "they" directed towards? I assume it's the girls in the lines above but I mean...yeah.

The ones who get the drama attack,
You know who you are.
The ones that are hard to grow up with
-- I get the jist of this, but making it clearer would be nice. Like starting with "The ones who get attacked by drama queens" and so forth~

The women that turn 5, once they have to face a crowd.
But in reality they are 21.
-- maybe put this in one stanza? Like maybe "The 21-year-old women that turn five once they have to face a crowd." I think it would flow better, but it's up to you~

But yeah, awesome poem~! Totally relatable and simply empowering!

Keep writing~! :D

Posted 5 Years Ago


justdandy

5 Years Ago

thanks, I will keep your critics in mind :) :D
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I feel like I can relate quite well to this. It flows well, and everything you describe is quite accurate.
I think your line "This is for the Girls. / The Girls, that are like me." makes this poem come together much better than the one for the boys. That's just my opinion though. Good job.

Posted 5 Years Ago


justdandy

5 Years Ago

I always cared for people's opinions, so I thank you for that.
I really like how you start each stanza directing it at a different type of female, depending on age and status, but in the end it is for any kind of woman. Great job!

Posted 5 Years Ago


justdandy

5 Years Ago

Thank you soo much
I love the last stanza. Anything that draws the concept of a poem together at the end is great!

Posted 5 Years Ago


justdandy

5 Years Ago

thank you soo much
A nice dichotomy of being feminine, the girls struggles verses the woman's. A prospective that more male counter parts in life should learn to understand. Well done! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 5 Years Ago


justdandy

5 Years Ago

Thank you soo much
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Life is full of its ups and downs and women get it far harder than us men.Really enjoyed your poem,psssst,if I was a woman I would have had a sex change !!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


justdandy

5 Years Ago

honestly I am a women, and I kind of like it. I would make bad man, if I love silk, laces, make-up, .. read more
"girls just wanna have fun" but unfortunately life won't often let that happen...there are too many dramas in life that make it very real and at times very brutal...but women are survivors, are tough...and this is a really good tribute to them.

Posted 5 Years Ago


justdandy

5 Years Ago

thank you for the kind words

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