The Flower in my Hand

I found it while frolicking

When the sky was dark and grey

And it was nearing six O'clock

when the sun just sunk away

I was running in the meadow

When i saw it rooted to the ground

It looked like golden sunshine,

The small flower that i found

Filled with glee, I plucked it

And admired its perfect form

Until the murky sky

Had been conquered by a storm

Sadly, I departed, 

Escaping from the mud

Only to never forget

That flawless little bud

Author's Note

This poem is not the best, but at least i tried :3 and its about the flower im holding in my profile picture

Reviews

[PaxtonBelieves~]

loved it(:
I also admire your ability to really paint a clear image in my head. Excellent work!!!

[Kat]

I really like this poem
It reminds me of all the pretty flowers in the backyard of my old house i use to go out there with my dogs and id run around and pick flowers until my Dad told me to come inside because it was getting too dark
thanks for the awesome poem:)

[misha]

I really like this piece and its simplicity. Great job on this!

[Allie :)]

This is a simple reminder to the world at how easily such a simple, beautiful thing can be taken away.
But that's just me, being all depressing and the party-shitter...
this was still an excellent piece, and shows that you can find utter amazement in the most simple, perfect things...even further proof that you are a legitimate poet... (89)

[Bailey C. Writing]

This is such a good poem :) I really liked it. The transition from the happy day to the sadness of losing the flower was good.
"When i saw it rooted to the ground"
"The small flower that i found"
*I. Just fixing a small grammar mistake or two :)
It tells a nice story, with a clear image in your hand. You're quite the good writer :)

[Miu]

Sounds like a pretty flower. I cant keep flowers caz my cats eat them

[☯]

This is such a lovely and adorable poem. I enjoyed reading this a lot. I especially liked the line:
"It looked like golden sunshine"
Very very nice job! :)

[Darius]

:D thanks everyone!

[DearSweetAgony]

WOW
I LOVE the rhyme scheme you have going here.
I love how you tell a very vivid story.
This is very good,very good indeed.
Great Job!

[Miss Sally Sunshine]

I like it :) the rhymes seem effortless, and the poems flows along beautifully :) Another great poem :)