today, evan told me he wanted spaghetti

today, evan told me he wanted spaghetti

A Poem by Darius
"

here ya go evan

"
I can taste it in my mind, 
This spaghetti I want
With thin noodles
And a rich sauce
Perhaps with some cheese
just thrown on the top

© 2011 Darius


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Great work!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


this was great, absolutely wonderful!
alltid
-Meja

Posted 12 Years Ago


P.S. You have a bad habit of sometimes trying to start every line with a capital...it stuck out to me, because I used to do it ALL the time!
Just remind yourself that capitals are supposedly to be used only after periods ;) Thanks boo :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is hilarious :)
It expresses who you are, but in an insanely artistic way.
You've offically achieved a level of cuteness that nobody has been able to reach before :)
I couldn't help but wonder if you could have added on a couple of stanzas, though they wouldn't have necessarily have to be about pasta :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


hahahahaha XD Fantabulous poem XD Amazing XD It seems to ryhme in certain parts, while not in others, but is still a good poem, none the less. The rythm was nice, and it flowed really well. Great pome XD

Posted 12 Years Ago


mmmmm .... Spaghetti... oops sorry there, got slightly sidetracked ^.^ , Anyways cute poem :-)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love you.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on April 26, 2011
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Hey there! I'm Darius Taro, a 14 year old MALE Asian person! I like horror movies, swimming, video games, RAMEN, and writers cafe! I've been stressed lately, so I took a one year break. BUT GUESS WHA.. more..

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