A Poem by Dark Beauty

My ocean's depth corrupt by bloody tears
from the sorrow wounds of my eyes
my vessel is shattering in this
struggle of a stride
Blinded by muddy waters
praying for resolution to mend me whole
in clean waters
To uplift my soul to the sky for renewal

I held on so tight
I clenched my own breath
by letting you go
even though you were cruel to my heart
I realized I was squeezing my own life
Now I open my bright eyes and see you are
the core to this madness

I let go
feel the sun's warm rays kiss me softly
and I know after this day
Love with come my way

© 2011 Dark Beauty

Author's Note

Dark Beauty

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You go from the pain and darkness to to light after letting go. Well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago

This was a great, powerful piece! You show just how strong you are through this write!

Posted 12 Years Ago

great writing, seems we have to let go to be free

Posted 12 Years Ago

some one hurt you pervades your writing.. I am glad it is gone.

Posted 12 Years Ago

0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The style of your writing really reminds me of my own thought processes. I really like this poem because of that reason, and I think the only thing that really needs revisions is maybe some punctuation here and there, but at the same time I really like it as is. "I clenched my own breath by letting you go" really speaks to me, and "I realized I was squeezing my own life" also does, too. It shows a coming-to-terms tone and now you're breathing through it and telling yourself that this is hardly the end. Great write

Posted 12 Years Ago

i agree with all the others, a great write.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Powerful write!

Posted 12 Years Ago

Yes I feel your poem as the rays kissing me softly, I love the feeling it makes come my way. Excellent write.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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I really enjoyed this write. Sad and dark.
Loved the words used.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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15 Reviews
Added on September 10, 2011
Last Updated on September 18, 2011


Dark Beauty
Dark Beauty

Tucson, AZ

Love to write Poetry, and SpokenWord looking for reviews with good or bad feedback as I will give reviews as well and any ideas are welcome!!!!! "Keep Writing, my pen is my Thy soul shall fi.. more..


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