Torn

Silver moon light
come and fill my soul
charge me for battle
to endure the death of night

Morbid creatures lurk
closing my eyes they show me
the darkened wrathful vengence
I must endure

Moving within me
capturing the moon light held
no strength to fight
I am forever transformed
into this hellish darkness

Caged by the battle of defeat
a slave to morbid creatures
I have been torn

Reviews

[Kenneth The Poet]

Dark indeed. While this piece speaks about creatures in dark places, this piece has a maturity to it. It relates the darkness within to the world with your stunning prose. I can imagine this speaking about depression and death because I feel that darkness within sometimes, and it can be scary. Nice work.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the feel and the desire of this poem. The darkness can bring you in and hold you forever. No weakness in this short poem. Direct and to the point. A outstanding poem. I like the strong description.
Coyote

[∂αʌ<..]

wow...so morbid! i could the darkness all through this magnificent poem!
greatly written!^^

[Demi Rose]

i think u have out done urself with this 1. thought it was penned well. especially enjoyed the last few lines.

I loved the part you write about forever being transformed into the hellish darkness.... I think a lot of people can relate to this. Beautiful writing dear xx

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Caged by the battle of defeat
a slave to morbid creatures
I have been torn


A great way to end a poem, idk why but those lines really caught my eye...great job :D

[joshua deathdealer]

"Charge me for battle" Nice!! I enjoyed this dark tale of basking in the full moon. Excellent work. Great imagery.

[Inyourshadow]

Often have I penned to the death of night for this the time I feel most vunerable, for day brings not only light but others awakened from their dreams willingly to destroy mine. Beautiful poem, love the underlined sadness and the bittersweet tale. Keep em' coming