Ticking Clock

Ticking Clock

A Poem by Elizabeth
"

faces and faucets of time

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Time's like a sharp sword
Slicing and dicing through our bonds
Till all the ropes of friendship are frayed
And at one point-
it decides to break

Time's like a testament to our strength
Can we endure or do we succumb
to the trials and tribulations it brings us all
Can we climb the mountain- or will we fall?

Time's like a blessing in disguise
It heals us from the past
It may be slow,it may be fast
It covers the discrepancy of our behavior
Will we get wiser- or turn a failure?

Time's a gift
for ones scarred by life
Just want it to pass through our fingers like sand
when matters get out of our hand- We all
into deep slumber want to fall.

© 2017 Elizabeth


Author's Note

Elizabeth
Wrote it on an impulse. Constructive criticism highly appreciated

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Poems written on impulse are almost always our best works. This is no exception. great work, and excellent insight into another intellectuals thought process :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Elizabeth

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words :)
Time is something most folk consider... poets more than most, I fear and why should you be an exception... And still she keep on ticking...nicely penned DarkMist......

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Elizabeth

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
Neville

5 Years Ago

my pleasure & no time at all.......N
Hit to the chest like a bolder and sunk into my soul like an anchor. Very good with making words relate. This was an excellent write. Sometimes the best things we write are on an impulse, and this is one of those cases.
xo FLB

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Elizabeth

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
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"Time's like a blessing in disguise
It heals us from the past"
so true! excellent words!
keep writing :D

Posted 6 Years Ago


Elizabeth

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your review
hmmm..love this one

=> Time's a gift
for ones scarred by life

Posted 6 Years Ago


very nice choice of words... i can relate to it... so realistic one... great job done :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Elizabeth

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your review!
You're extended metaphors are great, and I love your diction. All of your writing, well the little bit that I've read so far, has little truths that are true about life, which is probably why I like your writing so much. Don't quit writing, you're poems are beautiful.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Elizabeth

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the review. Your comment has really made my day!
I agree with the below lines.
"Time's a gift
for ones scarred by life
Just want it to pass through our fingers like sand
when matters get out of our hand- We all
into deep slumber want to fall."
Time is very valuable. I told people. Please do one good thing daily for yourself. Life is very short. Don't work and work till you die. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


Elizabeth

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your review! It means a lot to me.
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
This poem leaves me in awe of your work. This sort of reminded me of a movie ( i dont remember its name) in which people bought and sold time. Because i agree with you time is a gift it could hurt and heal us. A very touching and relatable poem

Posted 6 Years Ago


Elizabeth

6 Years Ago

Oh yes! I remember that movie. I think it is called 'In Time'. Thank you so much for your review!

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