Positive Attraction

Positive Attraction

A Poem by DarkRainbowPie
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I met someone recently and have toppled head over heels for them already. There's just something about this guy. I need to see him again, and I hope he needs to see me.

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Goosebumps isn't the word
For when I see your name,
Or hear the words you have to say
To me.

You are not here, and won't be soon,
But I yearn for the time
You'll spend
With me.

I've seen you once,
But a second comes fourth.
I wait for the day you come
For me.

Distance is great,
But can be travelled
And will be, for you,
By me.

Our time together has not been long,
Yet long enough for me to say this;
I have never felt nor thought this way before,
Never once have I craved someone's kiss

In this way, this state, this frame of mind;
I blush in the midst of such fuss.
But I know it's worth it, I can taste it, I thirst it;
For the day it's not me, but
Us

© 2015 DarkRainbowPie


Author's Note

DarkRainbowPie
This definitely isn't written in my usual style, and it is 3:42am, so, this could go either way... BUT; either way, let me know what you think. :) I'm struggling to judge this one, myself.

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O- MY - Freaking!- God! Judge no further, this is a gem. I think you have the wrong "forth" unless you were going for the ordinal, but....there's an A-bomb of an expletive wanting to be let out - that's how amazing this is! AAAAAAAHHHHH!! Well freaking done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Very nice piece, and poignant. Strong subject about love...glad I read it :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


I can definitely understand the want to be with that special someone, I enjoyed this poem, thanks for sharing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


DarkRainbowPie

4 Years Ago

I'm glad my ramblings make sense to someone, haha, thank you very much for another positive review :.. read more
We are our own worst critics...
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The thing that makes your day is just being in another person's presence.
I like that feeling.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your comment, much appreciated :)
Great great writing here! I love your lines "Distance is great, but can be travelled" lots of power in your words as well!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your review, glad you enjoyed it! :)

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Added on January 25, 2015
Last Updated on January 25, 2015
Tags: love, desire, lust, relationships, frienships, boy meets girl, love at first sight, yearning, craving, journey, hope

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DarkRainbowPie
DarkRainbowPie

Dublin, Ireland



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Hey there, guys. My name's Annie, I'm 18, from Ireland. All there is to really know about me is that I am a MASSIVE nerd (...would like to wager that I actually do live and breathe science at .. more..

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