Death

See I told you no one would miss me, but you didn't

Understand. When I died I saw you you did not cry, though

I told you to miss me, you never did. I took the pill and waited

Changing, trying to heal. I never did. You knew I loved you, for

I told you everyday. Now I burn in hell for you to live so well.

Did you even care about me at all, you never came to stop me

Everyone, but you saw me fall.

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

Deep and haunting but realistic feelings. It's like wanting to be a fly on the wall to see the repurcussions. Even though you may feel this person may not mourn, in time, it smacks one in the face. Great expression and your emotions made me almost tear up.

[Dutch Jr.]

Great expression, great poetic tone and voice. You're talented. Keep it up.

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I, personally, have trouble dealing with the subject of suicide, for personal reasons. I wish that I could tap into those personal reasons and create the type of feeling that you expressed. My grandmother succeeded, a lover of mine succeeded, and a friend of mine just keeps trying (he can't seem to get it right.)

[Greg the Bard]

I have read a lot of your work on the "Cafe" and I must tell you I like what you are doing. This pome is no different. I feel it is darker than most of the work I've read but it is REALLY deep. I hope it is not a fad that will capture all your works. I found myself wrap up in one subject and had to stop writing for a while. Never the less it is a well thought out work with many strong points. It has great image anad smooth flow. I love the ending as well. It gave me cause to think about what was going on in the metor of the work. Well done.

[Taylor_Anne_xoxo]

hello, you entered this in my contest and im so glad i found it elsewhere because i cannot comment it on the contest form. I just want to say that i love this poem. I like how you encompass the suicidal thought and really show "what they were thinking" when people kill themselves. That and I also adore the acrostic form! a lot of people lose depth when they attempt this form but you captured it perfectly!!!

[Krazy On The Outside]

Great poem!
I really like it! =)

[Butterflymom]

This is very good. You expressed the feeling very well.

[Monday Tape]

I think this is such an awesome poem. You can really feel the emotions and sort of empathize with it.

[Mrs.Lovett]

Shawn This's really good. Who ever says you're not good. F**K THEM