Letters for a solider

Letters for a solider

A Poem by DarkIriswriter
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A letter to a beloved solider

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The writing on the page didn't mean anything, without the words written in my heart; all I could think about was tha my solider was at war

 

The words becamed blurred and tears were rolling down my face, visions of remembrance became true for I kept seeing you getting on that plane so far away

 

The last time I would ever see you , you whispered closely not to worry and that my love would always be in your heart

 

the kiss on the forehead made me long for you to stay,the lingering embrace couldn't phantom me form saying that I love you

 

Letting go of you was the hardest, for seeing the expression on your face telling me that you wanted to stay;You sought to fight for your country without leaving your love behind

 

The hope in my heart knew the love in your eyes would bring you home to me,my letter would never bring hope to me again when the war had out done you.

 

For my dearest soldier you wouldn't be coming home, but in the light of gladness.

 

 

 

 

 

© 2008 DarkIriswriter


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it's so sad
but it wouldn't be war if it weren't

Posted 15 Years Ago


That is really sad, but war is rarely ever happy. Good peice.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I enjoyed this piece..I dont care what other said about it..It was a great piece...Soldiers appreciate receiving letters from fellow americans..just to let you know...You did a great job..keep up the good work...=)

Posted 16 Years Ago


the kiss on --- the should be capitalized.
you also place periods at the ends of the last two sentences, no where else.

but this is just structural gibber jab. as a piece, it's quite well done, sound in voice and imagery, conveys depth through a wonderful sence of voice. another good piece.

Posted 16 Years Ago


the suggestions i have are about spelling and grammar: you have some typos and you need some punctuation, such as:
Looking down as I was writing, the tears were rolling down my face; it hurt to even see you get on that plane so far away,

i think that would just make the rhythm better and easier to read. that said, i can tell you put a lot of emotion into this, obviously. war is truly a terrible thing, but you have to keep hope.

Posted 16 Years Ago



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Added on May 25, 2008
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