Invictus

Beneath my feet lay my enemy
He was struck down and died
With his end comes serenity
For all of those who are justified

~-~

His rise to power earned by those he charmed
With great power he fell
His road filled with families whom he harmed
Many sons on their death knell

~-~

With his tyranny gone
The sun shall shine
For his evil begone
This victory is mine

~-~

My battle is won and done
To my home and family I ride
In my home amongst my loved ones
My family awaits me by their side

~-~

Homes will be rebuilt, fields renewed
Ashes no longer stain my sight
Hopes will come true, for this day is new
Now, there is nothing but light

Author's Note

A wild hair. Please feel free to critique, comment, and such.

Reviews

[AK]

Beautiful work...captured my emotions so well. It's simply PERFECT!

[paparapapa]

This a great write! The character of the poem is narrating his story but in a poetic way. You pulled it off, so good job! I specially loved the last stanza. It portrays well the feeling of hope after a war. Thank you for this! :)

[Bridget Murphy]

Well done, I like this poem a hole lot, thanks for posting it!!!:)

[TheElfPrincess]

This sounds so much like a story within a poem, I mostly loved the sentence: Ashes no longer stain my sight. A wonderful poem. Well written.

[T.W. Early]

I really liked this one! good writing.

[Ruth]

This is almost myth like but with such realistic detail...a battle on whatever front - this is awesome! xx

[Ignitedstar]

?! Are you actually writing about a true happy ending with nothing bittersweet? This is new, coming from you, Makon. :P

[.n.]

This makes me think of a Greek myth. Interesting concept and well-exectued.

[Raven Starhawk]

In the greatest words I can accumulate this was a skillful weave that I can examine and still reach the conclusion it is flawless.