Is Being a Soldier Worth The Pain

Finding yourself sometimes means losing yourself at the sametime. This is what i felt

Graduated sitting on a couch wondering where I belong

A commercial on t.v. saying they can make me army strong

I signed up and after i finished all of my training

i couldn't stop dreaming of the adventures that would be waiting

Shipped off to afghanistan I thought i had it all planned

My first mission i was to drive the convoy van

All of our vehicles single file we cut a path down the road

We were ordered to never ever slow

As we drove by kids charged toward our vans

In nothing but rags holding out open hands

I thought about about the raid my comrades said the other day they did

More than a few of these children are probably some of the victims kids

It made me feel kind of sad and when some soldiers tossed out candy i felt sorta glad

The superior officer said stop and now i know why its bad

This little girl with big brown eyes and dirty matted hair

Saw some candy and noticed that no kids were there

She ran faster than the rest grabbed thecandy and  felt so bold

But she ran right in into the middle of our road

Soldiers do exactly what they are told

Oh why do we have to be so cold

I was going to fast i couldn't steer away

The thud sound when my car hit i still hear today

When we got to base there was a death silence no one spoke

No one could break the ice there was no mirth with any joke

Whenever i get in car and begin to drive

I look over  see the little girl and feel dead inside

She is the one thing i will never get out of my head

The little girl with the beautiful smile and knowing im why she's dead

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think. Oh and by the way im not an actual soldier. Im just a dreamer

Reviews

[.Bunnie.]

Oh well thank the Gods that story wasn't true. Jerk...you had me tearing up, lolz!!

I think it was awesome! Loved it. I could picture the entire story in my head. I'm just super glad that this was only fiction and not something you have to live with on a daily basis.

[Coyote Poetry]

Your poem told a real story. More innocence die in War then Soldiers. I told my son. Get your a*s to college. War teaches you death and bull s**t only. I spend 15 years in the Army. I like it. but it isn't fun. It is very hard work and a lot of responsibility. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[These Haunted Hallways]

WoW! Completely heart-wrenching story here. Very sad, and it grips so tight. U wrote this extremely well, and im sure it must've been painful to write. Whether it is fiction or not, it draws the reader in so much that they're on the edge of their seat craving for more. Very well done here!!

B.A.

[Eternally Elemental]

Wow. Like Lynne said: "Ok not an actual soldier.. i was an actual soldier"

The reader is the soldier. And we saw that with more detail than anyone can know. I can really feel the barren land through the steering wheel and that horrifying sound of yet another innocent life disappearing for no good reason. Whether she died or not I was still on the job, and that meant killing more of their fathers. Giving them candy doesn't feel nearly enough for what I have done. In fact it feels like an insult.

Amazing way you delve the reader into this perspective. You may be a dreamer but you gave us all a nightmare. That is a real feat in writing. I don't think anyone of us that have read this will forget it.

Another urban feeling rhyme. It rolls of the tongue casually and reads like a journalistic entry. You can feel pain. I can feel it happening.

This is an amazing piece... it has really wowed me.

[talulu love]

WOW!!!! soulja boy..hahaha wow its very good ...luv the rhyming keep it up...hopefully ur not living thisas a reality...man i luve how everything flows 2gether...ohhh and some grammar mistake but otherwise AWSOMEEE

[karmic]

Being a dog is never worth the pain, but someone has to do it. Anyway this is a great poem and keep it up.

[cest la vie]

Ok not an actual soldier.. i was an actual soldier and this is really good..
I love pieces (real or fiction) that draw me in and yours did that in your simple, amtter of fact way.

really a good write here.