I just want to be Numb

I'm hopeless, I'm hoping

I'm shattered, I'm coping

And I just want to be numb

Missing the sweet embrace of rum

Shivering, heart beating

Defeated, and dreaming

What should I have done differently

Just lay me down gently 

I need healing, I need hope

Wanting to be bound by your rope

Already seduced by your laughter

Am I really falling for her

Complicated, I need simple

Rough life, so now I'm fragile

And I'm regretting my hopeless attitude

Feel so raw, I feel so nude

I'm hopeless, I'm hoping

I'm shattered, I'm coping

And I just want to be numb

Missing the sweet embrace of rum

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

You sacrifice meaning for rhyme. It's not a respectable trait in a "poet".

[David-Tyler]

You again? You're still on this? What a loser lmao

[Davidgeo]

I've moved on from my initial distaste of you. This how you take criticism on the regular. I pity you... you will never grow as a writer with disposition.

[Davidgeo]

(insert 'this' after "with" and before "disposition")

[David-Tyler]

Oh you moved on? My apologies. Now you say that, I can totally see it. That's exactly what it looks like. Yeah, this poem sucks. I store my good stuff somewhere else, somewhere very private. That way if someone who's on the same level as you doesn't get any ideas about disguising my work as theirs.

[Davidgeo]

Poor kid. Good luck with that "eternal butt hurt" disposition. It won't fix your faults or lack of talent.

[David-Tyler]

My lack of talent? Yeah, I'm buttheart I don't have the approval of a random old guy on the internet who has comment section fights with someone who's twice as young as him! Sorry, man. I should just pack up and go home, let you hog all the fame and glory since everybody sucks your dick. Let me tell you something, I own that this poem sucks. I still think your s**t sucks. If we were Stephen King, we'd be making money, and signing autographs. But instead we're here.

[Davidgeo]

You're embarrassing yourself in this moment. Maybe you should post all those "awesome" works you claim to have elsewhere... if you're going to act all superior it only makes sense. (oh wait, you're obviously full of s**t... my bad)

[David-Tyler]

Yeah, I'm so full of s**t you drop all of my points to tell me I'm embarrassing myself. I did drop a few of my average works up here and you disappeared, conveniently. Man, if you're the sperm that won, your dad should have had a vasectomy.

[Davidgeo]

Um... I don't rate your poems one way or the other with rating points. I think you might be projecting a problem you have with someone else on this situation for lack of anything else to retort with. Like I said before and you have only made more worse --- you are embarrassing yourself right now.