A Coroner's Assistant and his Girlfriend

I tasted you with Beethoven and a yellow

cry of delight: bourbon, I think it was,

but I know that taste to be smoky brown

and thorough in its erasure. Still,

you linger. Long past mortuary drawers

sliding back on liquid wheels

and the buzz of bone saw. Autopsy

was not so kind as my last kiss,

though both left marks. I cracked

your skull to prove the accident

and found no trace of me.

Reviews

[Dean Kuch®]

Compelling, chilling and downright creepy. I have no complaints. This was a short, masterful piece!

[Angela Mulley]

It's an interesting piece and I have to say, I've never read anything like this before. You did a great job with your descriptions, it certainly gets the imagery going in the readers mind, then here... "I cracked your skull to prove the accident and found no trace of me." it goes on to take a twist of horror towards the end. Great write!

[Adelia Alighieri]

This was interesting, I must say, great description, unique subject. I'm impressed.

[Cynthia]

I love this REALLY much, its the first time I read your work, and wow, its so amazing! I am so enjoying reading this! Such a unique piece of write, I gotta say, its special from the others! The imagery of this poem is really nice as well, wonderful!

[Jeremia]

Simply awesome. You had me glued. I enjoyed reading this, the description and writing style brought up great imagery. I definitely get a picture from this. Thank you for an enjoying poem.

[Kerry O'Connor]

Wow! Another brilliant piece - this quite knocked the breath out of me.

[OT]

I agree this is my favourite so far too!! a very unique write - I've noticed from a few of your poems your style is to snake lines around - it is a unique take which you've mastered here! the descriptions, as said in another are spot on - I love the opening lines

"I tasted you with Beethoven and a yellow
cry of delight: bourbon"

and then contrasted with the harsher

"I cracked
your skull to prove the accident
and found no trace of me." very nice!!!

[TheFemininePad]

Very different and unique. It flows so smoothly, and it's a rather interesting way to write a poem. I really like your choice of words as well. I do agree that it is bizarre, but in a good way.

[SpitfireGrrrl]

I really, really liked this. Concise - but very clear images. I could see it, nearly taste it, and hear it. The best kind of read.