A Chapter by Dave Brown




Had a super big head

And an extra big mouth

That kept him well fed

He liked to eat

Donuts and bread

Which also caused his

Mid-section to spread

T’was then his mother

Somewhere had just read

That he should be eating

Vegetables instead

So all that excess weight

He'd be able to shred

And hopefully shrink even

His mega sized head


So, it happened that

He worked to become thin

No bread or donuts

Were now going in

They have been all

Re-labelled as a mortal sin.

And along with many sweaty

Trip to the gym

He’s now become the

Same size as a pin

His poor mother’s bad eyes

Can no longer see him

All most people see

When he flashes a grin

Is a row of bad teeth

And a buncha loose skin


© 2020 Dave Brown

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Good rhyming, Dave. Tell me, though, after Ned lost all that weight, was he still hydrocephalic? Seems as though he'd look like an exclamation point.

Posted 11 Months Ago

Dave Brown

11 Months Ago

Oh oh John!
You have got me again and just after my daughter-in-law put a new lock on her hoa.. read more
John the Baptist

11 Months Ago

It refers to the large head.
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LOL I have lost 100 pounds and I still have loose skin of which might be helpful if I fall out of a plane just maybe that skin will act as a parachute like those flying squirrels? this made me laugh thank you for that!

Posted 11 Months Ago

Dave Brown

11 Months Ago

you have experienced the pitfalls of excessive shrinkage, now it is time to start eating, althoughI .. read more
Loosing weight has its pitfalls. I'm sure Ned agrees. I think its okay to be a bit fat as long as it's not endangering general health. Enjoyed this poem!

Posted 11 Months Ago

Dave Brown

11 Months Ago

yes, Ned did overdo things
and a good morning 2U

11 Months Ago

Its good evening here 😀 Enjoy your day!
yes, when we lose too much weight too fast...all that extra skin.
when love too much, and then lose it...all that extra heart.

Posted 11 Months Ago

Dave Brown

11 Months Ago

my head is still the same size, oh yeah the brain shrunk, guess that's why i've lost so much hair
Oh boy, took it too far i think. I've always thought people look better just a little filled out.
The extreme in either direction doesn't seem healthy. Fun story!

Posted 11 Months Ago

Dave Brown

11 Months Ago

I thing it is all about momentum
Once the ball gets rolling!!!!
A. Papya

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Added on August 14, 2020
Last Updated on September 4, 2020

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