(or) Flat Earth 11

(or) Flat Earth 11

A Chapter by Dave Brown
"

yes it is

"

Finally digging through to flat earth’s underside

There we found chocolate and candy

Which was being made in great vats

In a modus operandi

 

There were apple pies, three-layer cakes

And an overflow of peach cobbler cuisine

The houses had roof tops and window sills

Made of icing pink and green

 

Raspberry people walking neath meringue vines

Had rock candy hair, wrapped in pecan pie

In licorice arms they carried ‘Mars’ chocolate bars

And they had a double vanilla donut for each eye

 

White chiclet teeth surrounded purple popsicle tongues

Their breath was like a banana cream dream

While all round, juices and caramel sauces

Shone down each passion fruit sunbeam

 

There were custard streets and jello walks                   

And gingerbread houses with angel cake lawns

With marshmallow hedges and candy cane trees

And strawberry bees flying toward tapioca dawns   

 

Banana floats and peach ice cream cones

Floated with blueberry pancakes all round the town 

The only real problem we noticed was that

Everything all hung upside down

 



© 2020 Dave Brown


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"Paracosm"
I'll assume you are aware of the definition of the word. But , if not - it is what I saw here.

Love how descriptive and vivid this is. ☺



Posted 7 Months Ago


Laconic Meraki

7 Months Ago

Honestly, I did have to Google tonight to tell you the word because I couldn't remember the word. Bu.. read more
Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

It'a an odd one alright .
Laconic Meraki

7 Months Ago

They are classified as "rare" for a reason mr dave.
-with admiration

C.
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Hard rock candy hair and purple popsicle tongues? I imagine all the barbers and dentists there have to drink to make it through the day.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

sodie pop martinis, drank out of frozen daiquiri shaped glasses with marshmallow ice cubes
'h.. read more
Oh, you're being naughty with this, probably causing your readers to seek sugar highs. I can imagine you dreaming this after passing by a cake shop window, but not getting to go in and indulge. What a wild, wild imagination!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

Sam, when I was a young kid, on my way home from school, I passed a bakery on the main street.
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Chocolatetown officially extends it's hand in peace to upside down cake world.

I'm sure I don't need to say it, but...
I approve of this wholeheartedly.
Very nicely done, captain.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

Thanks
BTW, I think they can use U down there
Their chocolate vat was only about half .. read more
Dripping Chocolate Madness

7 Months Ago

An emissary shall be sent, henceforth!
Fly a Raven to Mr. Goodbar! In all due haste!
I think I have just died from an overdose of sugar. This is about as sweet and varied as you can get. This is every kid's dream. Your imagination knows no boundaries Dave. Write on.

Chris

Posted 7 Months Ago


Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

I had to brush my teeth a few times after this
can't resist those double chocolate donuts
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As it always does, your imagination is beating the drums while banging the sky. I was once told that I don't have a sweet tooth, but rather, every tooth in my mouth is sweet. I suggest this applies to you. You write poems about sweets like I write poems about dogs & beards. You write poems worshiping sweets like Augustus & Jibey write poems worshiping the human form. I think I'll go pour another cup of coffee with three-fingers sweet syrupy creamer, along with frosting-slathered toast. My pancreas is crying out after reading this! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

We are arranging 'get away from the smoke' tours if you want more sugar and spice
BG
Move over Willy Wonka, I want to tour Dave's world.
I would die there though. The sugar would kill me.
:) but what a sweet way to go!

I really love your imagination here. Makes me think of CandyLand.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

like you say, a great way to go
floating on pancakes through a maple syrup sky
Burp!read more
Ana Papaya

7 Months Ago

Lol! Yup. Sure is!
(BuuuurrrrP)

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