Free Verse

Free Verse

A Chapter by Dave Brown
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In an effort to upgrade my image

I made an attempt to write free rhyme

Consulting my computer for assistance

My finger’s started tapping each line

(oops! I mean each word)

The theme I was to pursue

It couldn’t help me there

It offered only

A black empty stare (I mean, empty screen)

With my fragile image being a concern

Staying away from any rhymes

Was a method, I just hand to learn (er, Figure out)

But total frustration with all lack of rhyme

(uh oh I mean sameness)

Resulted in only a scream and a shout

(Oppps, I mean, the hell with it)



© 2020 Dave Brown


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This might be too obscure for anyone but a rhyme-aholic to "get" . . . and I LOVE IT! This is the crux of "SHOW don't tell" -- you make us feel that tug, so hard to resist, rhyming without even realizing we've done it. I love your snarky slice (first line) for all the free-versers who scorn us rhymers, saying we're not sophisticated as they supposedly are. When I do free verse, I get more passionate reviews, so I can tell people like it better. But stopping myself from rhyming would be like trying to hold back a s**t that's reached it's time *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


Dave Brown

3 Months Ago

i am as unsophisticated as they come and poetry meant rhyming to me so i don't really get free verse
Every time I try free verse, my muse goes on a strike. So something must rhyme in all my poems, to keep her cooperative.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Dave Brown

8 Months Ago

sounds like me, but in that word challenge thingy you leave me far behind
i wouldn't even att.. read more
AJNJ

8 Months Ago

Gladly I'm off them for now. They're like little monsters chewing the brain. :)
My free verse generally starts as a conversation with myself.
You should try it. :)
You're still rhyming here. But I'm thinking that's intentional. :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Dave Brown

8 Months Ago

Your advise is always beyond reproach, I'm just a bit concerned about that 'talking to yourself thin.. read more
Ana Papaya

8 Months Ago

See ! :)
Dave Brown

8 Months Ago

heh heh

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