Ringidy Ding Ding

Ringidy Ding Ding

A Chapter by Dave Brown
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The size of a raindrop

The length of a noodle

Whether the whole thing

Is both kit and kaboodle

The amount of air

To make a kite fly

How quickly

Time passes by

The size of each leaf

Hanging from trees

The funny sound made

By the buzzing of bees

The humming bird

Hour after hour

With his beak

In more than one flower

The length of a root

The size of a boot

The scurry and scramble

When the Owl does its hoot 

The pleasant sound

When a bell makes a tingle

Christmas thoughts

Of a special Chris Kringle

The height of high

The depth of low

The direction

A creek’s likely to flow

The sound of a flute

The sharp of a thistle

How everyone stops

When a cop blows a whistle

Each little thing

Has its own

Ringidy ding ding

 

 

 

 



© 2020 Dave Brown


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This is unbelievable! Truly one of your best! Your imagination is soaring as rhyme & rhythm lift our toes & sets 'em to tappin'! This poem doesn't have a dull ordinary line in it. I loved this poem from the moment I read the title. I also knew it was a poem by you, even tho my library does not reveal author, but just the title gives you away! I remember when I used to be able to write a lighthearted ditty, but I'm afraid my recent poems feel jaded & dreary compared to this. I need to snort up a fat powdery line of this s**t so I can infuse myself with your merry magic! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


Dave Brown

4 Months Ago

Thanks Margie
Appreciate your response and always nice to see a word or two
BG
Oh Dave,

I'm going to quote these lines because they encapsulate such exquisite images and feelings - poetry is all about word compression and getting us to think beyond the obvious:

The height of high (how *high* is that?)

The depth of low (how *low* is that?)

The direction

A creek’s likely to flow (down? but maybe around an obstacle? What possibilities!)

The sound of a flute (lilting, melodious,merry or soothing - pleasing)

The sharp of a thistle (wonderful contrast in these two lines! Any gardener knows that thistles *bite*)

How everyone stops

When a cop blows a whistle (HALT!)

Each little thing

Has its own

Ringidy ding ding (and wonderfully told)

I absolutely love this poem! The sounds of the words themselves (important) the rhythm when read aloud and the images captured make this a delightful experience. This would make a wonderful text for a picture book for children. One constructive comment, in your second line there is a typo, the word noodle is mispelled 'noddle'. Minor detail and easily fixed. Overall it's a pleasure to read!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

I was completely unable to sleep last night, just dropped off now for an hour and woke up to your ex.. read more
Tuskie Deb

7 Months Ago

Ah, insomnia, the writer's b*tch. LOL I find the hours between midnight and 4:00 am my most producti.. read more
Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

( : )
This is just fantastic! Love!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Ana Papaya

7 Months Ago

So not thrilled :(
Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

Better than choking on smoke
Ana Papaya

7 Months Ago

Owch. You guys are getting a lot of that from Cali ...

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