Sipping Soup

Sipping Soup

A Chapter by Dave Brown



I wonder why stars twinkle

Possibly it’s my sight

Because I blink so often

That half of day is night


My eyelids flicking up and down

Is really quite a problem

Cause when I try and sip my soup

My spoon is always wobblin


Some goes in my eye

And some gets up my nose

No matter how I try

That’s how the story goes


Tho, when I write a poor poem

It’s much less of a crime

Cause when it’s an awful write

I only notice half the time


© 2020 Dave Brown

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This is popping with cleverness . . . "half of day is night" . . . "I only notice half the time" . . . this kind of inventiveness makes me wish my cerebral matter were half as vigorous as yours. I have officially entered that phase of life where I spill everything I touch on myself. I'm wearing whatever I was doing in the past hour. Well, at least I haven't progressed to diapers yet. And my eyes are still open more than half the time! heh! heh! heh! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago

Dave Brown

6 Months Ago

not sure how I got here but your mention of diapers had me wondering if you'd seen 'Capone'
O.. read more

6 Months Ago

Have not seen Capone. Just watched a great movie/documentary on Amazon -- "Tennessee Whiskey -- the .. read more
Dave Brown

6 Months Ago

I'll look
we can't fret over what we can't see. when you really get old we'll have to feed you through a straw or maybe with a slingshot - we wouldn't have to worry about hitting you in the eye because you can't see anyway. seriously, clever and relatable. i always say that such things are the good "stuff" of life - our faults and foible in this thing called life. look at the bright side - you could cut people in lines and then say that you can't see as an excuse to get away with it. at least you've got the soup, sometimes i can't even get the damned can open ... :)

Posted 7 Months Ago

Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

I am not going to disagree with you one slight bit, at least while you are wrapped in what looks lik.. read more

7 Months Ago

lol. there's an easy solution - just don't get old ...:)
Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

👍 .
Could you use a straw? What about a feed bag? A guy has to have his soup! I know--you could prop your eyelids open with toothpicks. Yeah, that's the ticket. Problem solved. Now, if I could just get my right eye to quit closing when I drink coffee, I'd quit pouring it in my left ear. Now, who's the silliest?

Posted 7 Months Ago

Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

Morning Sam
I'm not so sure you can do anything wrong with a good cup-a
Enjoy your Chr.. read more
LOL my favorite soup when i was a kid (it was my go to feeling sick remedy) was Campbells chicken and stars soup so literally i would have stars in my eyes if my hand shook:) My problem is i blink a lot too and i still dislike my poems most of the time:/

Posted 7 Months Ago

Dave Brown

7 Months Ago

you must be numbered among the very few who feel that way about your poems
Enjoy your Christm.. read more

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Added on December 23, 2020
Last Updated on December 27, 2020

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