Appaulin

Appaulin

A Chapter by Dave Brown
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Up here there is a-ton-a damp gaulin

Sufferin from soaked sky endlessly fallin

Belting down rain drop’s most appaulin

From black clouds stubborn n’ stallin

And till sunlight’s wonder comes callin

Need is for a super sprawlin, tarpaulin

Till gettin back to bouncin beach ballin

 

With heavy hopin, that it’ll be denied     

Our nearly slip-sliddin, saturated hillside

Has got us all seriously super cockeyed

It stirrin moist, mud swill right alongside

Wanting to blend a sloppy, post-yuletide

Into a wilderness mountainside joyride

Hoping to sweep us down by dockside

Condemning we all into a riptide collide

 

However, an optimistic interjection

Addresses our dank, super soaked objection

With expectations of a black cloud correction

Kabloinking into a Spring steppin direction

Aimin for a surfing, warm wave convection

Creating dream loads of blue sky injection

With a light bending sunlight resurrection

Not influenced by any faked election

  

 



© 2021 Dave Brown


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Another one of your best ditties, coincidentally picked out by me on the same day I'm poetically bemoaning long toasty winter afternoons with nary a drop of rain. I love your top notch wordcrafting here -- with zinger after zinger . . . especially the middle verse, I could picture the hillside burbling & belching, threatening to sweep down in a gully of mud & backwash. Not to mention you're wiping my a*s with your long leisurely monorhymes. Enjoy your rare sightings of blue (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Perfect to describe your locale: "black clouds stubborn n’ stallin"

Posted 3 Months Ago


Dave Brown

3 Months Ago

yes its annoying but things might be breaking up a bit, thing is, we need a snow pack
BG
You must be praised for fining so many rhymes and using them without losing the sense behind your thoughts.


Posted 4 Months Ago


Dave Brown

4 Months Ago

thankyou for that and many good memories to you
Wonderfully descriptive and fun to read! The first paragraph confused me by the words used as I didn’t understand what most of the last words meant. But maybe that’s just on me. Anyways, great read keep it up!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Dave Brown

4 Months Ago

Add a 'g' to the end of each word which will probably help
Nice to have a visit from the othe.. read more
I enjoyed the humorous aspect of this poem, which carried through from the title to the last line. Making the last word of each line in each stanza all rhyme further drove home the sense of humor over the whole situation. Having lived in western Washington, in a neighborhood atop a steep, clayey bank that experienced frequent mudslides that threatened to send the local houses on a quick and short voyage into Puget Sound, the second stanza brought back anxious memories for me. Well done.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Dave Brown

4 Months Ago

Thanks
Its not raining right now!!!
feels unnatural

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